Golden Sands embrace my back
warmth envelopes my being
as Zephyr's breath teases
whisps of cool sky tickle my skin
Azure Skies hang over
like a canopy of a harem
its prism rays meet my face
and shimmer like glass candy
My eyes close and I listen
to the sound of the breeze
whispering in my ear
as zills chime in the distance
A crisp cool laps at my feet
as they dance on the surface.
The teal oasis provides my retreat
when Orange Sun asks for too many kisses
A contest entry
- The Happiest Place On Earth! by loveisthemoment.
300 points, ended April 27, 2008, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - My Oasis by Rovingone.
900 points, ended May 31, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Excellent poem. I love your choice of words. Descriptions like Azure skies hang like a canopy over a harem and the breeze whispering in myear, as zills chime in the distance. It gives the whole things a exotic feel.
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Beautiful ... the 3rd stanza makes me want to just take a deep breath...love it.
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thank you, that stanza seems most calming to me as well, im glad it had that affect on you as well!
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this is really good, thanks so much for entering!
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You have certainly described a very happy place where one can find contentment. Your choice of words creates a very specific scene. Great job.
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Thank you for the comment, glad i could share my serene escape with another!
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