My ostrich ran with distinctly gay abandon,
last night through Stockport town and back into my yard.
Today I saw it ailing, such a sorry bird,
after-all laying lots of big-opal-orbs is hard.
Dancing, squawking, quills a'flying,
try to aid, no point in trying,
would this bird gain bliss from dying,
such a sight had grown lads crying.
Awkward wing-flap limbs as-play,
brought such sorrow for my bird;
just as always on laying days,
sounds from lung and throat concur.
It took such fright, I could hardly look
now obviously going to lay again,
upon my mind I just can't allow
such ornithologically, ungainly, ongoing pain!
Rich as I was on my much supply,
finding now no days of want,
so happily on Monday I took and sold it
to a local bird-staurant.
I know this ostrich long had run around,
up and away with all my braid of brains,
but now I count out rich and oval phantasms,
I'll show you that my cupboard still contains.
Having brought such harmful wrong
to my chubby dotty bird,
throughout Thursday I was down and oh' so sad
and so for you this rambling stack of words.
Author notes
*PO' Contest* How to bury your hXad in the sand, with no e's.
In a list
A contest entry
- Poem of the Week - POW by Arkbear.
1000 points, ended April 21, 2008, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Welcome any sincere responses.
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lol... eggactly
hard to read with out cracking up
congrats on the golden oval
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Heh'... thanks for bringing my memory back to this one!
'xgzactly' ?!
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That is very difficult! No E's!? So hard... I'd go insane trying to keep out any e's! Almost every word has an e in it... but you found things that worked without any e's! Congrats! I can see how you won the gold trophy! Congrats!! I really loved it. =) Keep writing, until you can't no more!
xXDCXx
~Make Peace, Not War~
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No e's??? I didn't notice and when reading it again I was just amazed!
A difficult task which you made seem so easy to accomplish. Don't think I could ever do the same without using e, not in any language, except in Greeks, maybe
Well done!
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Thank you
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Oh, you are so very clever. Well deserving of the gold.
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Congrats on the well-deserved Gold!! Outstanding job on this one!!!
You maxed out my clappies so I'll just give you some
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Much appreciated aboomer! Thank you Sol
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This was beyond worthy of the gold. Congratualtions on the win, but more so for an absolutly amazing write.
Very few could pull this off....and to do it in such a short period of time....and then to score a 10 for grammer!! Wow. I never comment twice. But on this I had to! CONGRATS!!
Jamie
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Thanks so much Jamie !
I also greatly admired your entry and find your work in general, most inspirational, so congratulations on yours too.!
By the way, I have something new on the go now, for your new contest
Sol
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I also didn't notice the lack of e's until it was pointed out. I thought this was sad, how the bird lives a slave life, only laying eggs for others' benefits. Good job!
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yay!!!
this dotty bird is proud of your dotty bird, has she come back to the cage yet?? she's a minx
well done Sol, you've done good here lad, yes -
Sol,
Great job on this write! Congrats on the awesome reviews! I really enjoyed this one! All the best!
Jack
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Wow. I didn't even notice the lack of e's until it was pointed out. Definitely a good thing. The poem flowed wonderfully. Very cute write. I love ostriches-they're so goofy. And I agree with the previous commenter, 'Trista' about the bird-staurant. That made me laugh out loud. Great write
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I am “wowed” beyond belief! This is the second entry that has taken what could have easily been seen as a simple pain in the backside rule, and turned it into an asset. What a wonderful and funny work of art!
I do think flow is bound to suffer at least a little when writing under such a difficult restriction, but I’m duly impressed with that as well. Oh - and perhaps my favorite part of the entire poem, “bird-staurant“.
I know you did a bit of editing after entering this, and even though I have no suggestions for you at this time, I hope you’ll continue to perfect it as time goes on. Again, for the second time today, there’s just not much I can say other than, “well done, poet.”!
Good luck and best wishes,
~J.
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BIG BIG HONOUR!
Such a big honour, to receive such reviews, from both yourself and Arkbear.
6AM this morning here in UK having not slept from previous night, I was beaming smiles! ... Then I was gone!Thank you so much Julie Sol
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Incidentally...I had surgery on my right hand last spring and am supposed to have a similar one done on my left yet. (Been putting it off now that I know what to expect. lol) I don't suppose you have any poems written only with letters from one or the other side of a keyboard?
Okay, seriously...You did great! I'm glad our reviews gave you big smiles, but honestly...you could ~ and should ~ feel fantastic about this poem no matter what we say.
Have a beautiful day ~ Bear should have the contest results out as soon as he wakes up. Meanwhile...Now it's MY turn to get some sleep!
~J.
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Sniffle, sniffle ~
You didn't say anything about my *not-so-E Z* review
The Bear is crushed...........oh.....yeah....this is all about the Poets......my bad!
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Because silly......
....it didn't have one E in it as well.....hehe.....was wondering if you would catch it...lol....oh well....after Sols entry, who would notice my silly attempt
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Well, like I say- yourself and Arkbear get to review many poems and I believe I am by no means the only one who appreciate and respect having the particular benefit of such eyes and indications on our work. It means a lot, really and I'm certain that it's why these PO contests are so well attended.
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HEY BEAR!!! Frikkin-(BIG-BIG-BIG-SMILE) :))
I thought it was a matter of form... not to interfere with anything until judging was over! I was clicki'n my heels in the air with your review... then being around 6AM here in the UK... I just had to go to bed
I wish you could have seen the smile on my face John and such sweet dreams! Thank you so, so much. 
Sol
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Hi Sol :)
OK....what can I say?
You took the obvious, and did without it throughout your brilliant sculpting thoughts ~
This is a fantastic work of art, and proof that you don't always allow silly rubrics to say how you can imprint fabulous Impact, Thought and Focus into your hard work for this POW corrivalry :)
Frikkin brilliant!
Good luck Buddy,
John ~
Tag 10
Flow 9.85
Abyss 10
Topic 10
Aura 9.95
Grammar 10
Grant 9.95
Oringinality 10
To Think About 10
Ability to follow Rubrics 10
My Tally: 99.75
WHOA!
No changing!
:)
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I caught the Rubrics...Tally and...
Way to go! lol
*PEACE*
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Wow, superbly done, this had to have given you brain ache! A whole poem with no -e- and not a short one either. A fantastic read, very well done! Good luck in the contest
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I love how this has turned out, it has driven you nuts for sure, but you've come up with the goods on this one Sol, it is so funny and makes me smile from ear to ear
the chubby dotty bird part always raises a smile from me
love love love it Sol... makes me smile, alot
Plus, I know there is a sort of Adult - Part II to come at some point, which no doubt will raise some smiles and chortles too, it's always good to smile and to let go once in a while.
this does remind me though of Edward Lear's poetry as did such lovely nonsense verse but it always had hidden messages laid inside them ..........
this piece is like that, cleverly so
Gilly.x
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your sheer genius won me over
...I did think, what if someone penned a script with no "E"s?
well, my friend you have done so with "ease"
congrats....
-ryan*jaw wide open*wrecks
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(BIG SMILE!) Thanks very much Ryan. Sol
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Amazing....absolutly.....my head nearly exploded with just 2 lines! What talent to pull this off!! Hysterical to boot. This rocks! PERFECT title too.
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I'm honoured, with such comment from, you jamie, thank you! Sol
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This is too funny! Not funny for the ostrich, of course, but oh, my!! Not a single 'e' to be seen..you are amazing!.
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Thanks Neon, you know I read it and it seems to loose all flow, then I read it again and it seems to work okay!, weird?! Sol
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No e's in the whole poem!!! Have never tired that before - two lines was plenty for me! LOL Well done- makes one look all the harder for those letters.
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Always nice to here from you grannyeri, thanks! Sol
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Oh - love your title, too!
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X'purt'ly done with no "e's"...lol - EvEn in your Author's notEs..
Nicely done!
best wishes in the contest.
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Hey thanks aboomer! Sol
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Bravo! onward!
Finalist! lol how long you work on this?
E-nough of the no e's!
Best wishes in the contest.
Write on!
*PEACE*
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'You are a child of the universe...'
I love the Desiderata, you must have very good taste and I look forward to returning the 'favour'. Thanks, Sol -
Thanks islekine, yesterday evening and this evening, my ostrich ran away with my brains! Sol
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Your ostrich did very well!
Gold in my book...
The flow is not as even as it would have been..using other words, but to tell you the truth...I tried to pen once with no "e"s...
It ain't E-z
Take care!
I have a copy of Desiderata that I got when I was nine.
Still in original plastic. I will be fifty-four this year.
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Hi islekine, I forgot to say, that I agree with you about the 'flow'. I've thought of a few changes which would improve it now, but alas, I believe it is too late. I shall make them after the contest.
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