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Boy

boy you were my everything
when it came to guys.
i couldnt picture life without you
by my side.
but two years past
and im ok.
i think ill do fine without you there
holding my hand
each step i take.
but theres somthing bothering me.
i just have to say
why did you go..
go so far away??

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Written December 13th, 2003

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  • AngelBabe
    July 17, 2004
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    Whether this guy left you, or just left without wanting to leave you i'd say you've handled yourself VERY well.. I really can connect to this poem because i had someone that i love very deeply break up with me but not only that, the guy that i DO love more than anything i never get to see because he lives far away too.. it sucks but like you said, you may still be confused as to "why" but at least you're not still asking yourself "what happened". You recognize you will be ok but i don't blame you for wanting the answers.. I really liked this poem, awesome job

  • megaroniANDcheese
    February 2, 2004
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    This poem has alot of thought put into it. I wonder if all of these poems are about the same guy. Oh, love and what it can to to you, but heartbrake can make for some beautifal poems, and you proved that! one sujestion, you should try and fit in some rymes in some of your poems, it really spices things up. But that's just a sujestion. Don't take critizam seriously, it's what you think that matters!
    Keep up the good work!
    BroKen Wings.