Strong as steel barriers-
They guarded my heart
Sewed it together-
When it fell apart.
Soft caressing fingers-
Wiped tears off my face
Warm arms, close embrace.
Those were my Protectors-
Iron gates to my soul
But now they've left me-
Life is spinning out of control.
I am afraid of all the hurt-
That I must cope with on my own
To withstand all the pain-
Within this abyss I've been thrown.
Author notes
to my protectors; andrew and scott
A contest entry
- Personal Best: contemporary poems. by Brit-Girl.
700 points, ended August 12, 2008, 38 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Those were my Protectors-
Iron gates to my soul
But now they've left me-
Life is spinning out of control.
nicely written
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i like the simplicity of this piece,
the rhyme is forced in places but i actually like this...
thank you for your entry,
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"Sowed it together-" - "Sowed" I think you mean "Sewed", I could be wrong .. don't think so, though. I get that "Sow" means a mass of metal melted in molds but in the way you use it, it seems like "sew" which if you meant "sowing", I feel "sewing" works better anyway.
"Desending into stone." - "Desending" would be "Descending".
A nice poem that you have written here.
-Nam
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Very good - but sad - write. The rhyming is good. The only word I had trouble with was Disending on the last line. Is that what you meant? Or did you mean "going down" as in descending? Anyway, good job!
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yes... they did. >.<
angi's all by herself now; cept scott still
mangages to confuse her out of her mind. -
they've left you?
--but very good write--the emotion is strong
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