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Soot

soot tears
stain my cheeks
they are shed
for my transgressions
the many sins
i deserve to be
punished for

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  • marlene47 silver member
    April 19, 2008

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    I like the vision "soot tears" calls up, and the relationship of the soot/ashes, the general confessional tone and awareness they brought on.
    Very Nice entry.
    Marlene

  • Nighttime angel
    April 19, 2008

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    Wow this a very powerful poem to me. so full of emotional pain and very dark. Love your take on the prompt.

    good luck

    kat


  • Unsigned gold member
    April 19, 2008

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    ok firstly at first glance this looks boring and then you read it and the words come at you with a gallop, meaning washes over you like tidal wave...Very very impressed with the simplicity and the depth.

    Well done poet
    Really enjoyed this


    Simon