Colorless dreary dimmed dreams
dissolved hue to deathly pale.
As dismal cobwebs cured humanity
placing past vitality within -
padlocked cemetery.
A contest entry
- 10/20 PIF Quickie by Nighttime angel.
950 points, ended April 19, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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The crunch of "padlocked Cemetery" Ouch!
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Your title fitted well with this piece - tied in with the end line
have to be honest though ... this wasn't as good as most of your writing ~shrug~ don't know why (lol! maybe it was past your bedtime so I should shout at Ash
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An eerie piece to read but well done.
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Thank you!
*huggles you*
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Your cobwebs curing humanity and "placing past vitality within - padlocked cemetery" gave me a chill.
Like it!
Marlene -
hmmm..interesting I read this four times and liked it more and more, one to be studdied...carefully.
Very nice poet
Simon
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I love the wording that you picked for this. I think that you've done very well and I wish you the best of luck!
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beautiful done! great alliterations, I like your second stanza the most. Good luck in the contest
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aww wow
i love this
wonderful job here
such great desciptions
you have me beat
good luck
stephanie =)
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Nice job!!!
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This is great
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interesting & great take on the prompt
best of luck
tasha
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good luck =)
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