Looking back; tear-drops mirrored
her regrets, jailed in a temperary life-style,
surviving a dark time.
Innocience swallowed, her soul retains.
Author notes
Picture Inspired; picture found on Gothic Picture Gallery.
A contest entry
- 10/20 PIF Quickie by Nighttime angel.
950 points, ended April 19, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Some great phrases here - tear-drops mirroring regret, temporarily being held captive in dark time. Powerful last line.
A fine entry.
Marlene -
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Aw, thank you
I was at the point to delete it.
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Leave it where it is!
Marlene -
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oke. I will
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this is good
i love you
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you have a great poem here. I enjoyed reading this so much. I love the last line a lot. excellent take on the prompt.
good luck
kat
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I like the last choice of words..you have to read it correctly because the eye says one thing and the words say another..I really like this...shame about the spelling.
Well done poet
Simon
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no, not shame. Just leaning, because English isn't my first language.
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Oh that last line just really stings with emotion. I like the imagery in this piece here. Well done and good luck
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I like it... A lot
Pst.. check spelling.
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Wonderful
Very powerful take on the prompt. best of luck in the contest.
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awww wow
this is great
wonderful write and good luck
take care
stephanie
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good luck
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