I want to apologise
dear mother
I'm sorry for my mishaps
and always fallowing the trend
I want to ask for forgiveness
for being another teen statistic
Pregnant at 17
Falling in love with girls
I'm sorry I'm not the child you had hoped for
I'm sorry i droped out
and got a dead end job
That the dreams you once had
no longer are up for grabs
G.E.D doesn't mean half as much
being a teen mother
juggling work, worries and growing up
You say I should be going through this
That I deserved better..
How can it be
That I'm something you wished I never would be
When you taught me the best you could?
I'm sorry mother for everything
For doing..
For being..
Even acting the part..
I'm sorry mother..
That I became you..
A contest entry
- Long-overdue Apologies by think of me x.
1100 points, ended May 7, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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THIS IS A GOOD ONE I AM HOPE-ING THAT YOUR
MOTHER WILL FORGIVE YOU FOR WHAT YOU HAVE DONE
KEEP IT UP
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Nicee.
I can't say I can relate to this, but it was very moving
I'd just go through, correct those spelling errors
Your title, for instance ^^;
Remember: spell check is our friend :3 -
i really like this poem it says so much, its nice to know that sometimes crap happens and sometimes that mom's try to live thier miss out dreams through their children, it happens all to often and sometimes the kids end up the way the mother never wanted them to be, on your 5th stanza did you mean to say "shouldn't be going through this" ? you have "should" just wondering other then that this poem is really well, i like the flow and all the thoughts this poem has, good luck in this contest, and keep writing, -Amy
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very nice. sad but nice. I can not say I relate to the details but in general i can for feeling guilt towards my mother. the write "your reflection" and "put me through" of mine i think you would sincerely relate too....alot of my writes i think you could. but anyway, this was a beuaitful write. i relly felt the emotion...good job
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