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Abandoned at birth, demoralised.
possessed
d.e.t.a.c.h.e.d
from your sin
invisible and almost inaccessible
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Author notes
Word Prompt - Picture above
Picture found on Gothic Picture Gallery
20 Words
A contest entry
- 10/20 PIF Quickie by Nighttime angel.
950 points, ended April 19, 2008, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Immortal execution for the brain
Comments
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Wowzers!! Lot of truth in there for a lot of people. That last stanza was amazing! "Inaccessible"... brilliant!! Again, I can see myself in there
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Your last stanza was truly amazing ... it's true, once we have lost all self worth we DO become invisible and almost inaccessible
congrats on the silver
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Fitting for the picture.
Dark,
Which I always like better from you.
Well done.
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First of all I like your presentation. The alliteration of "d" words, the separations in the word detached, and the diminishing at the end are strong elements in your very fine entry.
Marlene -
very orginally done! Beautiful take on the prompt. Good luck in the contest
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Wow I love this poem a lot. first the presentation of it, its incredible. the poem itself is a very dark write filled with emotions. the imagery that you bring forth is quite vivid. I like the last 5 lines. I really love your take on the prompt
good luck
kat
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This is great sweety goodluck
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Well I have to say that I looked at this and I said NO..then I read it and I think it is wonderful...superb wording and ecellent presentation...I personally am more expressive and I don't like to box things in, however it works for you well..
Congrats
Simon -
Lovely formed.
Enjoyed the read.
Good luck
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awww wow
this is marvellous
wonderful write
and good luck
take care
stephani
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Wonderful
Very dark and powerful creation. Best of luck in the contest.
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Okay... I take it that R is for reserved
I'm looking forward to the real entry in this contest
Love and
Granna
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Yep, I'm waiting for the prompt
Thanks
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