These tears,
tried
to captivate,
hope.
As failure
flowed through veins
poisoning my heart
and releasing
my whole.
[killing inspiration]
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A contest entry
- 10/20 PIF Quickie by Nighttime angel.
950 points, ended April 19, 2008, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Great write. Congratulations on bronze
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Very cool first sentence... and an overall topic of tears.
Nice phrases with the flowing, poisoning failure. I like your wording at the end "releasing my whole... (nope, not quite done) killing inspiration."
I'm impressed.
Marlene
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Great write...killing inspiration hey!...yip had some of that in my time..Really love this style and the delivery is superb.
Well done poet!
Simon
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This was really deep, and it made me think. I love you ended it. Very well done and the best of luck in the contest
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I like how the ending was. You could have said many things there.
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I love this sweety good luck in the contest much love
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I really love this poem. this is something that I have felt before. such a sad poem, emotions that poured off the page here.
good luck
kat
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lovely and sad
best of luck
Tasha
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Beautiful take on the prompt! Well done! Good luck in the contest
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Great take on the prompt and best wishes. Thanks for giving me the heads up for the contest.
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You also good luck!
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