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A Paradox of Sorts

Where would sunlight be
without the weight
of coming darkness
resting on its shoulders?

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  • Celticmoon
    May 18, 2008

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    I never much cared for questions in a poem. Rarely do I find one piece that cntains such and leaves an impression on me. Here your entire piece is but a single question to which you have punctuated incorrectly. It should end with a question mark rather than a period. Over all being a short write as it is it's not bad. Thank you for entering. Best of luck to you.

    Blessings
    Bel


  • B Chandler
    May 15, 2008

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    Very nice but might I reccommend using a question mark instead of a period at the end of the last line


  • Meme Wheeler
    May 1, 2008
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    Beauty! Nothing else needed to say.


  • Touchof1der silver member
    April 28, 2008

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    So rarely do you find such precision of a cohesive nature between a title and the content as one finds here. I like the profound aura surrounding your words here and the presentation gives them the dignity they deserve.
    ♥ Touchof1der


  • rbruce gold member
    April 20, 2008

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    A paradox of sorts? Yes, but the world is full of them. E.G: What would be good if there was no bad? Definitely an enigma, at least. Well thought out.

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