He walks along a path of death and bones.
He knows the story behind the names on every stone.
A cemetery he has built with his own two hands.
The ones he called family, now above them he stands.
Children to his left and his wife to his right.
They never stood a chance when the beast came out to fight.
He smashed in their skulls with a twenty pound brick.
He never blinked an eye or even felt a little sick.
He had no conscience as he took their life.
As he killed five children and his helpless wife.
Six people dead and there is more to be done.
This madman won't stop cause he enjoys this fun.
Wedding bells and a new born baby?
Who the hell knows?
Maybe just maybe.
A contest entry
- DW Challenge Round 2 by Ktulu Blackwolfe.
525 points, ended April 22, 2008, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I liked the story and the rhyming…
And you know what my opinion is so I don’t have to say it again and again…
You are awesome!
Maybe just maybe he’ll kill them too…
Thanks for being so great!
Keep Writing
Keep it up Dude!
Shuberth
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woah..a creepy write indeed.
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Very well constructed. I love the title. Good luck.
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i liked this is very dark right up m street or should say graveyaard, but im confussed with the title.
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Gosh that was chilling!!! A wicked tale you've weaved!
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This is quite the disturbing write, and I loved it...wish it could have been a bit longer, with just a bit more detail but still I enjoyed it.
Good luck to you.
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Wow, great piece, what a twisted mind..lol. Brutal and to the point. Love the pic to, adds to the eerie air of this poem. All the best in the contest
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Wow, this is awesome, sick and twisted all the way! I hate people who kill children, but fact remains that people do it. Anyway, your rhyme was great, and good luck in the contest!
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WOW Poppa! This IS DARRRRK!!!
It brings many madmen to mind. I have to keep an eye on you, you'll be on the newsstands next to King, in no time!
Fantastic narrative also, I was hooked from the very first word, you are incredibly gifted at making your pieces tell a story. I envy you that.
Best wishes Darlin, I dont think you'll need it, but I still wish the best, just the same.
Blessings, and Peace,
Jin
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