Falling in again
Around this black I have found
Amongst what needs mend
Spiraling secrets, I tend
Until they're inside out
Till sweat bleeds without doubt
Falling in again
Into a space and a time
Through irrelevant realities,
that still retain synchronicity and rhyme
Residue from another lifetime,
running its dirty fingers up my spine
Staring down this separation
Walking sideways with whats broken
I have to hide...
or else I can't handle it
What lies behind your eyes is dangerous
White lilies, yes, and cactus
Falling in again
Curving around color
Emotive will my intrinsic mother
Curling around my little hate monger
My sweet faced masochist,
no longer forsaken and unkissed
Skin soaked in its own tears
And collation nears
Author notes
I know unkissed is not a word, but it should be....thoughts, inklings, theories, musings, suggestions???
whats going on in your portals girls and boys?
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bravo
A tad arcane, but that all to the good, I liked this a great deal ("unkissed" is a perfectly acceptable word by the way.) bravo... bravo...
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This phrase....
"Residue from another lifetime,
running its dirty fingers up my spine"
Amazing. Blows me away!
Great Piece!!!
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Well, you manage to have an amazing piece, all right ^^
After all, the lines written here
run through well for the flow to be good
thus making this piece amazing, like I said
I don't know what theme is about, seems abstract
but I can't be too sure since my mind feels dysfunctional now
Never mind about that ramble,
all in all, this piece is amazing yet again ^^
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The first stanza threw me just a bit, but the rest of this piece rocks, well done bravo
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another interesting write, victim or self victimising? The vulnerability is well expressed and the creative need to merge yet seperate
Falling in again
Curving around color
Emotive will my intrinsic mother
Curling around my little hate monger
My sweet faced masochist,
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ooh! i love the second stanza, especially the bit about irrelevant realities, and the residue from another lifetime. i love the constant use of cacophony. this was lovely, beautifully structured, and well-written
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Interesting
It is a great and attention holding piece. It is also one of the written pieces that can be taken in so many ways...I truly enjoyed it. Nice meter and rhyme. Great write.
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