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The Only One

You put the cherry inside my pie
and extracted the tear from my eye.
The love we share is boundlessly rare
Because you constantly express your care.

A lessor guy would probably
Do less than you, making me blue.
But, you alone have rocked my world
You're the only guy for this girl.

So as I part lips to say my goodnight
Just know that its you alone; alright?

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  • DarkLotus4Life.
    April 25, 2008
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    Amazing poem. You expressed yourself well. good job


  • second-born
    April 20, 2008

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    oh this is so delightful...a very sweet proof of sincerity to a loved one...and you're the only one who could weave such piece!


  • Lsh-x
    April 19, 2008

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    'So as I part lips to say my goodnight
    Just know that its you alone; alright? '

    What an amazing way to end a poem! THe way you described it, i can feel the emotion, I feel the emotions your persueing in this poem. And i like it, i can really relate and understand it. I am really impressed!

    Very good write, Keep writing!

    Laura x


  • Abson
    April 19, 2008
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    VERY EXPRESSIVE

  • goalsv
    April 19, 2008

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    Nice poetic praise to a loved one. Imagery cute with a little humor. Liked the rhyme, made it fun to read.


  • individuality gold member
    April 19, 2008

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    a good poem, and another different one with the background and font use, a good love that whispers and sings at the same time

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