Open up that long lost part of you
Let your soul pour out
Let it flow on to the tears stained sheet
Tear streaks running about
Not fixing my pain
As I thought it would have
Slightly making it wear
As the words remind me of what I had
As the tears drops hit the freshly filled paper
It didn’t smear the ink
The words flew up at me
Faster than I could blink
I figured the purge of tears
Would help banish most of the memories
Yet they only seemed to magnify them
Making them rip me apart piece by piece
So when the tears drop being leaving their trail
I gasp as I realize they aren’t erasing my memory
Again my tear stains have failed
By: SLD 7/30/03
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Written July 30th, 2003
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great!!
again..i really liked this one girl..loved the rhythm of this write..its a great one like all of your poems! write on -
This says so much in only a little space. I know this feeling way too well. Excellent write as always. This is just beautiful and the way it is written is just angelic. This is definatly going into my favorites. Wonderful Job!!
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i cry too often. And sometimes i feel better, but then if things are better why a couple hours later or few days...do i cry again over same issues. The things that hurt never go away and are only replayed constantly and ever tear shed i want to capture in a bottle and throw it into the ocean, in hopes they neevr come back. I loved this poem so much, and id didnt mean to get all weird in my comment. This one is semi like "A Different Kind of Alcohol" by me...but expressing opposite. Ok grrrrr ramble ramble ramble SORRY!!! great write
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This is so sad~
But so beautifully wrote~
Emotion just flowed from it~
A wonderful write~
Smiles~Hugs~Emma -
terrific
aww good write I really like it its filled with emotion n I love the title!! It flowed very well...loved it sooooo much!!
Keep up the good work and take care
Steph
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Been there many times. I think crying will make me feel better, but sometimes it just hurts more. I think its good for the soul (and the heart) in the long run though. REally great write, keep it up.
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Umm SLD are my intials! That is how I sign all my poems... *sonya*
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what or who is sld. this was an aright poem. goooood job. lots of tears eh? saaad. nice and emotional though..
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Tears are such a bitter sweet gift. They cleanse the inner soul in away that nothing else can. You can feel their weight and life fall gently down your cheek to be caught on the edge of despair. This is truly what tears are for. A last weighty glance at an emotion, a time, a palce...and then afinal goodbye as they fall wetly to the tired ground.
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Sad hun, but just remember that we have the power over
what memories we will recall...
Hugs...Eddy -
I like the imagery in this. The tears that magnify instead of cleanse, I like that analogy. Very nicely done, you pain is palpable. Good work.
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What so many of us think...that crying helps and you feel better after crying. Maybe we feel better but it doesn't take away the pain of losing things...Your flow and emotion put in this poem are wonderful and I love it. Most everyone can relate to this at some point in their lives so you wrote a poem that everyone feels and that must've been hard. Great job pouring true feelings in the poem. God Bless
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This is an awesome write! I could feel your words of pain in theis. I loved your meter and style.
Great write!
TD
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Brilliant
Wow nice thoughts, clever play on thought too? A brilliant read. -
I like this one because its very detailed and to me emotion... I love the title
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Awesome
I loved this poem, it was beautiful and bitter sweet ! The symbolism was amazing! The way you described how sometimes tears only serve to magnify and not to heal was amazing, I loved this !! You have such a gift ! Thanks for commenting on my poem as well, I always apprechiate that ! I'm adding you to my favorites becuase I love your writing !!! Write on oh talented one... -
This was very sad , yet also very good, ty so much for sharing and also for the kind comments you left on my poem Nature, once again well done :-)
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The stanza...
Not fixing my pain
As I thought it would have
Slightly making it wear
As the words remind me of what I had
... touched me personally because I have felt those emotions all too clearly and could feel the pain again in reading your words. Beautiful use of the language to convey such a complex emotion. -
So much pain in this one, and it reminds me of days that it seemed like this would never end, but I always had you to turn to! U know I'd do the same...mail me sometime! I miss you!
Love Always, ~*Jemmy
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ohhh.. such an interesting poem...! =) i especially like the third verse, about the words flying up at the narrator.. such great imagery! this poem is rather memorable.. i don't think i have ever thought about tears and memories this way... thank you for giving me a new perspective (or if i already had this view, thank you for rekindling it).. =)
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very emotive, i know this feeling, everyone always tells me crying will get it all out and make me feel better, but it always makes me feel worse than i started off as. my favourite part was: "As the tears drops hit the freshly filled paper It didn’t smear the ink The words flew up at me Faster than I could blink" amazing write ~anya~
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this was very beautiful and heart felt... you did a great job and i pray everything works out the best for you... and thank you for commenting on my poem means alot..
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Wow Sonya I think this is great! All your poems are always great though, you always have such a nice way of writing them, in setting them up and making them flow. Your stanzas setup always helps too. Another masterpeice
Thanks for sharing, it was really nice, pretty way of writing, I liked the emotion I got from it.
~*~blessings~*~
~rora -
BeAuTiFuL wRiTe
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WoW! I loved this poem so much! I really liked it! It was really well written! I like crying to release the pain but sometimes it does make it worse by reminding me of the past! You captured that feeling/ emotion awesomely! The words and flow are beautiful and well written together! You did a lovely job on this piece! You have much talent! Keep on writing ...I love reading your pieces, They fill me with happiness! i LoVe YoU!!! -
wow i like this one alot, i felt the pain in this one. Keep on Keepin on. ~Dirk~
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