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Love's Plea

 

You make me want to be different.
You make me want to be
not my self.
I've given up identities
to love you the best way I know how.
Understand that I'm different
than those so-called men you've tried out.

This time, it's different.
Let me be
the one who brings the stars
to the forefront of your iris.

The one who can turn
your pain into pleasure,

and not in the bedroom.
I don't want to be another notch
on your bedpost.

I hope this is the day
your eyes open.

In clarity, they see that not

every guy is the same,

not every guy is me.
I am willing to become your reality,
greet you with a smile and a kiss.

 

Redefining love and changing your world,

hold on darling,

 

there's so much more than this.

 

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Lowercase Prelude (2)

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  • movedon
    July 28, 2008

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    am willing to come to your reality
    Greet you with a smile and a kiss
    And change your world
    There's so much more than this



    This make me wish more and more I wasn't your sister! I loved that last stanza. Beautiful work!

    Warmest,
    Mylee


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    June 9, 2008
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    I'm 20 and I live in Texas


  • Lyrical Rain
    June 9, 2008

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    You can be my boyfriend anyday. This is a beautiful poem and I wish all guys thought like this. Honey how old are you and where in the world do you live. A guy like you only comes once in a blue moon.


  • Little Lottie
    May 24, 2008

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    One of the reasons why I have lost hope in most of the male population is because they only want sex and I am not giving that up. The fact that you make a promise to not be that person is a refreshing thing, but I have heard that from so many people. But then you address other issues that someone might think about and it makes you appear sincere. You put a lot of thought into this, though I am not a fan of the use of the word "wanna" as it takes away from the beauty of your poetry. The rest of it comes with no other criticism. Thank you for your entry.


  • warrior-eagle
    May 15, 2008

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    Aw
    this is so tender.
    I really love your poems.
    This one is very sweet,
    and we always say this time is different
    but the only time it will be different is when
    mr. prince charming sent by God comes along lol

    ..Simply Me♥


  • Below-Zero
    May 14, 2008
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    nice i like the end i can really feel the emotion


  • tortured-heart
    May 14, 2008

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    i love it...it shows that there is hope for a real man in a world filled with guys who give love to get sex and girls who give sex to get love
    peace, love, & cheese


  • Mistress Masquerade
    May 13, 2008

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    So beautiful, both the poem and the background for it are amazing. This write made me think of the blessing of a boyfriend I have, he lets me be myself and loves me jst how I am.. This poem took my words away,


  • Nocturne
    May 11, 2008

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    Hi there,

    Well, this reads like lyrics - this could be either a good thing or a bad, depending on what the poem's goal is. For me, personally, poetry =/= lyrics. That's mainly because lyrics tend to only sound great when with music and with a person singing them.

    I felt that the emotions were very powerful, but I almost wish I could "see" what you're talking about better. Certainly you use imagery well. However, what I feel I lack is context. For example,

    "This time, it's different"

    - at this point, I'm at a loss as to where I am and what is going on. Certainly one shouldn't want the poem to "tell" the reader everything. That would be boring. But, sometimes, as a reader, I don't really wish to recreate my own world - I want to experience something new. Maybe the poem could be a little more open in letting the reader in on what's going on. Usually a concrete context helps a reader relate to the story/situation of a poem.

    In short, what I feel would strengthen the read is a stronger focus on letting the reader in, so to speak.

    All this is just my own stylistic approach to this paragraph and it might be completely at odds with what you want for your poetry. Just throwing the thoughts out there.

    Good luck writing. Cheers for the read!
    Nocturne


  • Simply Simple
    May 11, 2008

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    Amazing!!!!! And I love the background! This poem makes me think their might actually be hope and that not all guys are total jerks. Excellent work.


  • untouched pages
    April 25, 2008

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    I found this to be a read from a guys point of view!! But other than that it was a great read, it was real and I liked that, as if it was a highschool that found the love of his life!! Keep penning this was an amazing write..
    p.s Love the background very cute!!
    ~*Cristy*~


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    April 19, 2008

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    Ah..this is so honest and so beautiful verse revealing the story of your loveful heart..nice presentation..and yes impressive page as well.well done...

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