where freeway lanes arc,
gray-on-grey concrete coils,
one white egret waits
A contest entry
- THE WILD HAIKU by Swan song.
1259 points, ended April 19, 2008, 16 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is another well crafted haiku. Beautifully penned. Definitely a winner in my eyes. Congratulations.
Kelli -
This is very cool-the urban background with nature. The white egret, such a beautiful bird, hooray for your silver!
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A full sized haiku but well done You feel for the egret. They seem so calm in their envirment but you feel for them. Well done
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Many thanks for the comment and the silver. Both much appreciated.
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Man's rush to transport
contrasted by the lone egret,
superb!
Aesthete
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It's difficult to tell whether this is a comment or a poem...it reads flawlessly haiku-like. Thanks.
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Your words deserve
only the best
in reply!!!!!!
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