Everything around me
Becomes insignificant
You are all I see
Filling my vision completely
Words don’t mean enough, these days
But you have seen my mind, my head
You have washed away all of the gray
You know just how I feel for you
Forever in my heart, my mind
You’re occupying my every thought
Simply, baby, darling, you will find
I love you more than you could ever know
Author notes
I dont like rhyming. Its icky.
Option3
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I like this one
You did really well with the rhyming for the fact that you don't like rhyming!
It's a fantastic feeling when your feelings are returned and I like the line "Words don’t mean enough, these days" it's such a true comparison - sometimes word can not touch the surface of what you feel for someone.
Thank you for entering, good luck and well done for such a good write
Rebecca
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For someone who doesn't like rhyming, you did pretty well. This had a lot of emotion, which is always good with love poems
The last line is awesomeness
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This piece had a lot of great emotion in it, and I think you did a great job of saying all that needed to be said in only three stanzas. Thanks for your entry!
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EWWW
a poet.
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Amazing. Its so full of emotion. I really loved it.
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you have penned from the depth of your heart in this poem.....the lines of love do not always run how we wish them but with love we do not always have a say how our hearts react....nice one...so you dont like rhyme hope you change your mind on that number rhyme can be fun never so never.
Nice one
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