Forbidden heart
your longings will ever be chained
Forbidden heart
what trouble you bring me
why can't you be like other hearts
with their same longing
with their same freedom
Someday I will set you free
free to your passion
free to your whim
free from my chains
if only they weren't so heavy
A contest entry
- Nobody Perfect by Tara1396.
305 points, ended May 12, 2008, 16 entries
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Comments
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Hello ciao88,
This poem is very deep, and emotional. I can relate to this feeling very well!
I have some suggestions with this poem.
"your longings will ever be chained"
possible correction - ever - never
"with their same longing
with their same freedom"
possible correction -
"with their same longing and freedom"
"free to your passion
free to your whim"
free to your passion and whim"
I hope that one day you'll get what you long for!
Kari,
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