Looking back I see
That I really knew nothing
All those times I felt so close
Walking with you on that coast
I took it all for granted so
It all went away
Now i take these words with me
Right down into my grave
Every single day emancipate myself
From the ways I used to
Enslaved No More
Not Today
I will Pave a brand new way
Into the sky Before I die
Will make this write from the inside
I died
Inside
I decide
Resurrect myself
And respect myself as well
Walking down the street
All the same familiar places
Same people different faces
No need to replay worn out traces
Looking to the future
Knowing that I know nothing
Having nothing handed so
You can't take it away
Now i take these words with me write down into my grave
Author notes
Take control of your life.
A contest entry
- All walks of life by SilverWolf.
335 points, ended July 9, 2008, 41 entries
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Comments
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neato!!!!
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Now, I am normally not one for rhyming poems, but I think it's pretty good for the most part
I also prefer imagery,which adds alittle spice to a poem. Also, I liked the following part well :
"Will make this write from the inside
I died
Inside
I decide"
The fact that you structured the poem that way made it more powerful, I found.
There's always room for improvement, but for the most part, a job well done
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