I remember a time,
when each day was long,
when the world was my playground,
and life was my song,
And i fluttered through the years,
with barely a care,
Ignoring the future and what waited there.
School was intriguing,
and filled with delights,
I played away daytimes and dreamed away nights,
my parents assured me i had nothing to fear,
and that no matter what happened,
they'd always be there,
little i knew,
of a world outside home,
where tragedy,sorrow,and murder could roam,
all i saw were blue skies, rainbows, and stars,
i looked past the destruction of buildings and cars,
as a child,
my biggest concern was just me,
i had to be happy,
i had to be free.
And if i was content,
i would not shed a tear,
and no matter what happened, i still would be here.
But as i grow up, darkness starts to set in,
my bright world has turned into concrete and fin.
I know see the violence,
i looked past before,
my friends start to die, and my heart hits the floor.
Deadly diseases claim the people i love,
there are landfills below and pollution above,
i often think back to when life was a game,
but no matter what happens, it cant be the same,
There are days when i just want to break down and howl
to give up completely,
to throw in the towel,
but i hold my head high,
and push my way through,
i have too much to give and so much to do.
and i make a vow that though it'll be hard,
ill go on with a smile and play every card,
ill give all i can,
help others and love,
and all the strength i don't have will come from above,
so come take my hand and through the darkness we will sail,
If we join together we can never fail,
well remember to care,
remember to feel,
and no mater what happens,
our world we will heal.
A contest entry
- I Want Your Best! by JackFellDown.
550 points, ended April 20, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - CONTEST: Looking for poems, That will make me say: OMG! This is awesome! 810 points by echo-ink.
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Comments
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This was a really good poem. It does really transition from child to adult very well. It flowed very nicely, and has a great topic.
Good luck!
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your poem is really good but i've read so many just like it, you have to find your own voice.
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Yessa, Well, I said I would judge by how a poem effected my heart, and this one did. AWESOME, I loved this. Bravo!
This one will go straight to the finalists . good luck. -
Wow, This is pretty good, I love those rhymes, It seems a little unrefined as far as punctuation and minor spelling mistakes but the tone overall is really good. Not bad for being a poem that wasnt a prewrite. Great topic overall. The transition from being a kid to an adult is a tough one. Good luck ~peace
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