I lost my laughter,my smiles followed
Tears and sadness grew in to stay
losing all of mine
taking all of yours
being a happy-sad person
rather than a sad-happy person now
You smiled for me
You laughed for me
You betrayed me too
While i cried for you
I wept for you
I ran mad too
I remember every thing
Miss your timely ping
Staying a sad-happy person
engulfing the sad-sad person
that i actually am
I shall forgive you
and get you an autograph from drew
if only you promise me
that you'd hold me in your arms
when am dying
giving my unworthy life, a worthy meaning
upon death
making me a happy-happy soul
A contest entry
- Pif by luna-midnight.
550 points, ended April 19, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This was a wonderful write. Sad in the fact that it was a quiet plea to someone you love that you hoped would be there in the end for you. Something for one to think about, i would say. Who is Drew? I thought the way you change it from happy-sad to sad-happy person was quite wonderful, then ending it with happy-happy soul was what topped this piece of. You write so well and with such indepth feelings that are conveyed throughout your works. Once again, a wonderful write and i thank you for sharing this piece with us.
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thanks for entering
nice write
good luck
take care
stephanie -
Are you talking about an autograph from JD Drew? I have a picture of him with my best friend...lol This is a nice write. The one line,
"when am dying" I think it is missing something. Good luck in the contest.
Kelli
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