At the defense table in District Court Number 3
Anxiously sat my two brother pigs and me.
It had been a long, desperate and grueling trial.
The prosecutor was most noted for his fashion style.
"My dear little swine", the Judge slowly intoned,
"I empathize with you regarding your loss of homes.
However, Mr. Wolf will prevail with his lawsuit.
Your property loss claims are a misguided pursuit."
"The Sheriff should've been called on the fateful day,
To enforce the restraining order and take him away.
Although you pigs no doubt experienced some fear
Inside your brick home you were certainly secure."
"I determine with malice of forethought you set a trap ...
Thumping the table I squealed, "What is this crap?"
I rose to my feet, "This is outrageous! It is unjust!
I demand a retrial! It is my right to request!"
The Judge shook with rage and his face turned deep red.
"You pigs derserve solitary cells, water, and stale bread.
Poor wolf has been injured. His hair blackened and burnt.
In passing this sentence, I'll see that a lesson is learnt."
With a bang of his gavel, he read the sentence out loud,
"Ninety-nine years fore each pig, no parole is allowed."
Outside of the courtroom where a vigil had been kept,
The verdict was told. Our supporters fainted and wept.
Placed in shackles and carted off directly to jail;
No appeal was allowed and we were not given bail.
Ask Mr. Wolf if crime does not pay, the mangy louse,
He got all of our money and my lovely brick house.
Author notes
A poem by Woodchuck4400.
In a list
A contest entry
- Fairy Tales - Retell or Remake them! PREWRITES OK more points as we go! by Melissa Burns.
425 points, ended May 6, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrite only by kitty23.
470 points, ended June 6, 2008, 68 entries
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Comments
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ha ha this is very clever indeed have you ever thought of turning these into short stories, for olderkids say 8 to 9 my son would love them I think thetd be great with illustrations theres a guy named collin mcnaughten dont know if youv heard of him he's a kids authur illustrator with a style a bit like this he's very successful, these are really very good pieces of writing thanks for sharing littlefishone
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I have had a few people suggest that I publish different poems. I don't know if it is something I want to do. I may think about it. Thank you for your kind comments.
Mike
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AnOtHeR vErY fUnnY pOeM!!..
i LuV iT!!
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I just figured that is how the pigs would end up getting screwed by the system. I am glad you liked it.
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SoO TrU!!lYkD iT..uM nO..i LuV iT!!.
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This was really funny. In one place it didn't really rhyme but was so cute I love it anyway.
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I am glad you enjoyed the poem. Yeah... on this one I took liberties in that one spot to make the story flow. ..... i was bad... hehe.
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This is one of the best I've read!
Write on and on! This is well thought out and just fantastic!
*PEACE*
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I am glad you enjoyed this. Thanks for reading and commenting. I like putting a twist into some of my work. And, frankly, I just don't write poetry that doesnt rhyme.
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Nicely done
Very excellent poem here. I like the take you went with on this story of the three pigs. I seen several different angles of the poem that amaze me in that after reading a couple of times, this very well could have happened in our society today. All the best in the contest. Sounds like Gold to me. Take care, Michele
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Thank you for reading and commenting on the poem. I did a similar take on a fairy tale called Rapunzel. I am glad you liked it.
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You can even make the Three Little Pigs relevant in today's world! You are genius, alright!
bravo!
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I am glad you enjoyed the poem. The three little pigs are always relevant! I appreciate that you read my work and comment on it. I have fun writing.
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I just had to read this after you told me about it, and it was well worth it. Another fun and creative read. Those poor pigs! =(
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I am glad you enjoyed it. The thing that I found interesting is how many people thought the pigs were the good guys and how many people leaned towards the wolf. I enjoyed all the comments.
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LOL, That is definitely awesome!!!! Very creative thats for sure!!!
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Thank you for reading. I appreaciate your comments and the applause.
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Hahaha, i love the spin on the story. Reminds me how silly lawsuits can be these days, especially if/when the criminal gets hurt. I hope you do/have done other stories such as this. thanks for a fun read!
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I am glad you enjoyed the poem. I have done some other funny ones, but this is my first take on fairy tale. I have kind of a warped since of humor and will probably write more like this.
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That's officially awesome.
I loved the rhyme and wording, but their were a couple typos that kinda tripped me up. I think "fore ach" is supposed to be "for each" and "supportes" should be "supporters."
Other than that, terrific write! :-) :-) :-)
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Thank you for commenting and reading so closely. I hate typos, but somehow they plague me. I really appreciate you pointing them out and am glad you enjoyed the poem.
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Well done. I like it all.. Easy flowing, smooth vocab. Loved it.
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Thank you. It is rewarding to have your work appreciated.
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BWAHAHAHAHA! Hooray for fractured fairy tales and the like. This was brilliant! Excellent write, and the best of luck to you in the contest!
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I have always love taking a new twist on an old theme. It tends to jar people. Thanks for reading.
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How very true in reality! I adore the way you set about this. I really enjoyed reading it. Kudos.
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I am glad you enjoyed my scribblins. This contest was one of the ones that I have had the most fun entering.
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Modern day version of this great fairy tale - you have created a great spoof on the original. Liked the flow, the rhythm and rhyme in these lines. Enjoyed the read.
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I am glad you liked it. I very nearly had the wolf dining on pork, but that would have stretched things too far.
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This is just great, good to see someone in the wolfs corner, good twist on a great tail ( no pun intended)
All the best in the contest my friend
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I am glad you liked it. It is interesting to see the comments on both sides. Some in support of the wolf, others in disbelief of the injustice to the pigs. I hadnt expected the controversy. Thanks for reading and commenting.
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.*~Thank You~*. For your entry into my humble little contest! What sold me on this particular poem was the very last two lines - delicously funny! *oh my I cannot spell today! * Anyways thank you!
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I have been looking for something to spark my warped sense of humor for days. Your prompt did it.
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You punished the pigs, haha! Nice remake - Hollywood should do the same
p.s. I see certain gnomes are back to using words in their replies that require dictionaries (you should start providing those, yes?)
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I am glad to see you reading my poetry. I will send you a dictionary soon. I will find a pink one.
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LMAO You are something else Chucky! The imagination you have is so unique and wonderful. I loved this. All the luck to you!
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Yeah, I still have that warped sense of humor. It won't go away.
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I love this poem. It still holds true to the origional esscence of the tale put puts such a realistic modern twist on the situation. The sad thing is that in this day and age this is probably the most likely ending the the three little pigs misfortunes, because as always, the criminal is always a victim eh?
Great write.
Love it love it love it!
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I am glad you enjoyed it. I had fun writing about it and imagining the pigs in the courtroom.
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Thanks for sharing,this is truely a classic indeed,Hazel
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I am glad you liked it. In todays modern litiguous society, I am sure the wolf was actually the misunderstood victim.
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