I hate this place and all that it is,
vile, repulsive, holding me here.
I fight to get out, I scream for attention,
yet I would rather stay because she is near.
Author notes
I wrote this in "Writer's Gathering" (my schools poetry/writing club, the prompt was "traped." As usual, "she" was on my mind.
opt 10
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ok this was a little dark for my taste, ermm, it doesn't really tell me enough about you...I wish there was more! thanks for entering
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At least you have that one special person who makes it all worthwhile, not everyone has that and those who don't are unfortunate, I used to have it but not anymore nicely wrote.
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Wow, so short, but yet I can feel many emotions flow from this. You are amazing! Glad you's my brufer =] well more than my brother lol. Keep this writing up.
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Really, she was on your mind? I think she needs to start writing you some more poetry, but unfortunately, as you can see with "my muse" he can't inspire me as much as of later due to circumstances. We'll try though.
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i like this a lot. to the point but you can feel it's meaning very clear and how deep it is.
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