Awareness seeps in fiercely
saturating my earth
- a watering that was
long past due.
Osmosis of thought and
repression, it manifests
in this alter-reality.
Like a chameleon, it adapts
to it's surroundings
no matter the location.
Locomotion of motor
functions, I'm
trying to dance
underwater. Heavy
eyes are forced shut
yet I'm watching myself
in a grainy silent movie
Falling...fading
I'm flailing, trying
to grab a hold of darkness.
Gulping down derrangment, I'm
borderline hysteric, shouting
for help, bawling wake me up ,
pleading for salvation.
But no decibel is deciphered,
it's like laryngitis of the
soul
I'm desperate for
answers, cursing my
inadequacies, wondering
if not in my dreams,
where can I escape?
Author notes
Whenever I have a nightmare, it is the SAME exact dream....I tried to describe it in my poem.....as a student in the mental health field, when I analyze it, I realize that this dream represents my fear of being alone
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you can definetly feel your struggle in this! And the ending summed it all up nicely! Great write! Thanks for entering. Good luck!
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wow...this is very emotive...well penned....I LOVE LOVE that its about a repeated dream, I too have a similar situation, although its not the dream thats the same, its a specific object that keeps reappearing and I too wrote a poem about it 'Motif'....but anyway...I'm digressing lol. So, your diction is dead on. Love, love it, you are very deliberate with it, and I think that adds dimensions to your poem. And, the title, "Rem"...perfect, 3 letters that describe the sleep cycles where we have all of these dreams... glad I could read it!
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Wow... This is good... Your use of language is amazing... And it flows really well... I love the dark feel to this poem, it isn't dark... In that dark, dark... Sort of way hehe..
You know?
Anways hehehe...
Nice poem
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This is a great creation, I felt like I've seen the dream before just reading this... hope you have better dreams. Keep up the amazing writes.
^.^
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A great write with a fab flow. This is a wonderful piece you have penned. Love the descriptions you've used. Superbly done, good luck
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Interesting. I like the abstract presentation of your fear and how you relate it to other fears in a disassociated way. Another thing I was pleased with is your writing style, it really reminds me of my own thought process and how i write. A very powerful and eerily beautiful piece!
Thanks for your entry and best of luck!
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