Words are poor reflections of reality,
mother nature’s wonders are there for all to see.
But how can words express,
with the hope of much success.
The setting of the sun,
and the twittering of the birds,
When dawn has just begun.
The smell of new mown hay,
on a sultry summers day.
Swaying blossoms on the trees,
in a gentle summer breeze.
The first cry of a baby,
at the moment of its birth.
Its tottering first steps,
that cause us so much mirth.
The feeling of a baby’s gentle kiss
Upon your cheek,
The little words that tumble out,
when first they start to speak.
The sound a spoon makes,
as it meets the first milk teeth.
The cry a baby makes from teething pains,
from which there's no relief.
Yes words can’t even start,
to convey what’s in your heart.
Author notes
JUDMC....Prompt no.12.....words etc.
A contest entry
- Over The Moon With Baby News. by Poetryintheblood.
450 points, ended June 21, 2008, 5 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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450 points, ended September 16, 2008, 19 entries
Gold trophy winner
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500 points, ended July 11, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
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550 points, ended August 15, 15 entries
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Comments
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congratulations on the trophy wins. This write is so true. Words, no matter how well written never really reflect the reality of nature. God creates in such a way that it can never be captured by mere words. Thank you for the entry,
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I enjoyed this very much. Your imagery was inspiring. Thank you for entering.
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Very nice!
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Outstanding
I've commented on this poem before but it is one that I admire particularly for the clarity of the imagery so it is a nice poem to read again. It has a wonderful simplicity that engages the reader. Congratulations on all the trophys. -
This was a really sweet poem.
Makes me can't wait to have my
twin girls. If I read this when I
first found out myself I would of
felt comfort. I still did. I'm sure my
friend will as well. Thank you for
entering and good luck.
Take care
Rhianna M
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This is sooo sweet!!! I never ever would have thought of a baby poem to represent peace, but what else is more peaceful than a little bundle of happiness and joy.
Oh I loved this very much. Brought tears to my eyes. Thank you
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Shantti
Many thanks for your kind comments on"Just Words" so glad you liked it.Best Wishes and kindest regards...George
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I loved this! I liked when you mentioned the very first cry of a baby, that would only be music to a new mothers ears!
Aw, such a gorgeous write.
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Bandit Reading List Wow congratulation on the Gold
I loved this write it was simple but yet intriguing. I liked these stances;
"on a sultry summers day.
Swaying blossoms on the trees,
in a gentle summer breeze.
The first cry of a baby,
at the moment of its birth.
Its tottering first steps,
that cause us so much mirth.
The feeling of a baby’s gentle kiss
Upon your cheek,"
Wonderful piece of work, LISA
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Words can have powerful. I loved your opening line: "Words are poor reflections of reality," Congrats on your gold and bronze trophies and best of luck in all your contests.
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Congrats on the Trophies this has won ~
This is just breath-taking; I was so caught up in the words and flow I didn't want it to end
A beautiful poem that shows style, grace and a poets true self
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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Outstanding
You are right - we can only express things as best we can and try to capture something of the beauty in this world. Words sometimes seem feeble in comparison to what we experience. As poets our task is to try to relate some of this beauty. I thought the imagery in this poem was excellent and that you expressed your ideas very well. Best of luck in the contest
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Good reflective poem on the insufficiency of words to describe the wonderful things experienced in ones life. Well Done!
Dennis
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interesting link with the prompt
you've made an interesting connection with the prompt in submitting your poem.
i like the lines "The feeling of a baby’s gentle kiss
Upon your cheek, '
sometimes ii have found myself without words, utterly speechless, dumbfounded even by kindness, gentleness and the sheer beauty of each thing. in those moments i don't have words.
Thanks for submitting your poem,
I really liked it,
best wishes,
Isabella
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What a beautiful write, a great entry for this contest. A perfectly penned write with great flow and good imagery. Thank you for the entry. Keep the pen flowing...the pleasure was all mine.
Nevadapoet
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nevadapoet
Many Thanks for your kind comments on "Just Words"
glad you liked it.Best Wishes and Kindest Regards George ==
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I LOVED IT!!!!! Made me think of my son and how he is starting to walk and is teething. Very well done my friend, thank you for the entry and the best of luck to you.
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very sweet and precious write
Thank you for entry
God bless my friend...
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That is where poetry comes in, to play that role
for she has a way with words
Like your poem just did
I liked your write very much, thank you for your entry
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Thank you for your lovely entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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Wonderful poem and very true Dear Good luck with this poem
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This is simple, and yet so very sweet. Thank you for giving us a window into your heart. Bravo, a wonderful dedication.
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As a grandma, I can really appreciate this poem. It's filled with great imagery and touches my heart.
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nice. very nic
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Very personal and i apprecieate you submitting it. Reality as childhood? Or the love of a child, the little things that count. Very nicely done and good take on the topic.
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Cesarean
Many thanks for your kind comments on "Just Words. My wife and I have brought up three children now well grown up
and we have two grandchildren so we know what life really is about, thanks for asking Best Wishes George ++++
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A beautiful poem. This reminds me a wonderful song I know called Creations Call. Best wishes and thank you for entering.
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thank you for entering the contest with this very personal poem
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This sounds so personal. I like the multiple concrete images that seem to really show a story. Thanks for your entry.
~Diana
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Too true! Words feel so flat when one wishes to express pure happiness or enthusiasm, they can barely reflect one's pain and they surely sound banal when one is living through an earth shattering situation. But then again words are all we have for expressing ourselves on AP!!
"Yes words can’t even start
To convey what’s in your heart"
Sometimes though the absence of words itself is an expression just as darkness only means there is no light. Beautiful poem, you have here!!
"The feeling of a baby’s gentle kiss
Upon your cheek"
Really loved this line. It brings back memories of my niece kissing my hurt away. Babies are lucky in their innocence...
"The sound a spoon makes
As it meets the first milk teeth"
And the giant droplets of tears that fall from scrunched eyes and the howling that follows.
I didn't realize I had written so much!! Anyway best of luck in the contest!
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