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Who are You?

Do you know who you are?
Do you remember who you used to be?
When did life become so monotonous?
So much you do as they do.

You say what they say
Walk how they walk.
You sing what they sing
And read what they read.

Where did your mind go,
Do they keep it in a jar?
When did the heart inside your chest
Become replaced by grinding gadgets
Controlled by a computer?

Through the drones of uniform
Does anything of difference come forth,
Life is the same, day in, day out.
The people all, shells of fluff.

Author notes

Inspired by "The Hollow Men" by T.S. Eliot.

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  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    December 2, 2008

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    Well done and congratulations to you on your
    trophy for this piece! Keep up the great work
    here!




    Jeremy0826


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    August 20, 2008
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    Very thought-provoking...

    Great job - I love the message here!!!


  • WithinYourEyes
    August 20, 2008

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    I like the ending. "Shells of fluff" is a great line. I love the gist of this poem. I feel that way about people sometimes. Congrats of the Honorable winner...


  • kareneisenlord gold member
    April 25, 2008

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    Good interpretation of Eliot's poem. Even though "The Hollow Men" was written so long ago, it certainly applies to this day and age. That is the beauty of T.S. Eliot; so timeless and universal. Best of luck in the contest!


  • BluRosePoet8488
    April 18, 2008

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    I always said this would a dull world if we were all the same, acted the same and liked the same things. Very dull.
    This poem though is very interesting in the way that it presents just how dull things can become. Very well written. Keep the ink flowing and good luck.
    ~Donna~


  • Hebz
    April 18, 2008

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    Ineresting write, I like the flow very much...

    Only one problem I met when reading, is the color of the font!

    But overall, a very interesting write with deep & thought-provoking sense.

    Thnx for entering & Best of luck

    GloriousGift
    Heba


    • Mel-the-Believer
      April 18, 2008

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      Glad you liked it, and to explain the font, it was to show the dullness of everything, like there's no big difference, that's all. Thanks for reading and for holding this contest.


      • Hebz
        April 19, 2008
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        Well, that's a good point & I sorta thought of it...

        Thnx again

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