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Sand in our Lungs

I am a boat
foating on the blue
you are an umbrella
drifting under the blue sky

I am a fisherman
and you are the rich man's daughter
and the distance between us
is like sand in our lungs

We stare at each other
and we like what we see
but you are in the sky
and I am in the sea

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  • Perception
    April 20, 2008

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    wow... This is.... wonderful... The images you evoked were beautiful images of the sea, and the rough distance between these two lovers.

    This write, yet simplistic, is also brilliant. The ending is just perfect.

    "We stare at each other
    and we like what we see
    but you are in the sky
    and I am in the sea"

    Wonderful! This is just... another amazing write


  • Errant Panther gold member
    April 18, 2008

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    Intriguing title, perhaps the detail could have been expanded on a little more. Thanks for entering and best wishes to you.