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wild wind

wild wind--
our roof blows away
as we argue

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  • Candy6
    June 4, 2008
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    creative

    Brillant haiku. I agree with the poet, Perception says.


  • Perception
    April 20, 2008

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    Brilliant haiku. Such vivid images... with so few words...

    Just... Brilliant.
    I'm not really sure what else to say.

  • jodygirl
    April 19, 2008
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    This is one of the most interesting poems I have seen you write recently. I love it. What a related catch-22 in this one. Intriguing. Well worded. Contratulations on your trophy. Sorry I didn't get here sooner, but I guess, better late than never.
    Joan


  • azure85 gold member
    April 19, 2008

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    What a wonderful haiku, from the outside view of the wind, to the peek inside the house at what is happening.


  • Emerald13
    April 19, 2008

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    C&E? ... it works quite well without line 1 (i think) ...

    the idea that the argument is the wind in the fact the roof blows away works well ....

    i hope this is not a reality ? ... but i have seen in the news much havoc on the mainland recently with winds and rain ... warmest wishes >>> Gina


    wot about

    wild winds
    blow our roof away
    still arguing


    or argument

    and blow might be redundant with winds ?

    just musing ... love the moment >>> Gina


  • marlene47 silver member
    April 18, 2008
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    Wind puts anyone in a bad mood. I can hear it howling.
    Nice one.
    Marlene


  • Swan song gold member
    April 18, 2008
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    Now that is something. Well done

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