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My King, this game.




Condemned by bishops
adored only by pawns,
still no place for a queen.
A game,
dodging overbearing stallions
and fighting armed knights.

The tide flows ever inward
whilst my King stands aloof
secure in his castle
keeping.


Author notes

Credit picture --'Castle Keep' by M.L. Walker

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  • jcat gold member
    September 15, 2008

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    Oh WOW!!! I love this!!! You should be proud of this silly cause it is just pure brilliance!!! Love the use of the metaphor with the chess pieces and all!!! EXCELLENT!!! EXCELLENT!!!! EXCELLENT!!! Congrats on the shineys they are well deserved!!!


    • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
      September 15, 2008
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      awww what a compliment from you, thanks darl

      This is one of my very fav's from my collection, I love that you loved it too


      Cind's


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    July 19, 2008

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    this is an awesome piece Cuz.
    very creative. congrats on the trophies


  • Lil-Bit Crazy
    July 19, 2008

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    congrats on both silvers.... really great job here.... i fell lke thres no room for me too...anyway you did an awesome job thank you for sharnig this...


  • sailor ptolema
    May 30, 2008

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    BRAVA!!!

    So, I've already read this 4 times haha. You write such an original poem, using the chess pieces... I can just picture this poor girl, trying to catch the fancy of this guy, who has no idea she exists, feeling like she is not worth it.. Its ingenious. I'm going to add it to my favorites


    • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
      May 30, 2008
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      Thank you

      I will put the pic into it, dont know why I didnt when I went to gold etc lol



  • Intricate Wordsmith
    May 28, 2008
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    Good luck in my contest.


  • warrior-eagle
    May 12, 2008

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    I enjoyed this one.
    it was something I was looking for,
    for a challenging poem
    for me. Good work.
    Thanks for entering.

    ..Simply Me♥


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    April 22, 2008

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    Wowzers!! What a great write for that pic!!

    Congrats on the silver.. well deserved!!


  • ten thousand cicadas gold member
    April 19, 2008

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    Oh this is fantastic. You totally used the picture metaphorically. Loved the ending!

    Many congrats on the silver.


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    April 19, 2008

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    Oh this is so very creative. A real credit to the picture! Thanks so much for your entry
    gaylene


  • intanglio2ring
    April 18, 2008

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    Ah, the Queen shall we shall always give tribute!
    Wonderful entry
    Good Luck in the contest
    Tang


  • Lady Australis silver member
    April 18, 2008
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    beautiful sissy
    very well done
    good luck n muchlove


  • Cannonsfire
    April 18, 2008

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    Ah the intricate game of chess, played out on a real stage of life and written so very artfully by you. Well done. Love, C


  • neurosine gold member
    April 18, 2008
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    The smiley face isn't original art. Umn...I guess...watch this space is the message. k.

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