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Dermis - Abrasions



& He Sought Weak Seams


Angeline danced around the apartment, naked
bared no bones about her shape
neither skinny nor plump
her rounded breasts jiggled, like piglets
fighting to suckle -
she sashayed
to Billie, on the radio


from the veranda
Sol smiled & sighed;
smoking Sobranies


(Angeline didn't like the smell, but he never complained
'bout the skunk she plumed in every room)


scuffin' his feet on the milkycoated floor
fond of his space; he lamented
dead-heading the latent coriander and basil
overgrown in second-hand Habitat terracotta pots.
& in his periphary; his lover danced
within wintered skin


& he searched for weak seams.








SkinTight


She has skin
and boney promise
classical capillaries
flow young, blood
and nerves co-exist

I fashion voodoo pins
out of nails
skin
and teeth
flash them
into blue-tear eyes
pretend to curse
- make her disappear

There is something unnerving
about mirrors & morning

she is blinded now
- perhaps for the best
braille is such a nice

way to feel
the need.





Ash

Angeline flicks her fag
out of the sash window
to Tib Street, below.

ash settles on her breast,
blown back by the sickly breeze.
She smears it black and grey,
preens chiaroscuro rings
around her nipples.

- She hates painted sex
the click of the door,
creak of old wooden stairs,
snap of the letter box,
and how the outer door slams-
shut,

Solotkin looks up,
to her window.
the street cleaner
hisses,
by his wearied form.


He sucks hard
on his pipe,
hawks a breath,
and lights his love

away-

 

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  • apples fell
    May 22, 2008

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    I say this is poetic prowess at its first degree. There is a whimsical side to the voice, A little playful here and there, and then you announce that harsh reality in places, like a small and yet stunning crack on the head. The imagery from quiet to intense is something to behold. Everything from the form to the punctuation is dead on and I appreciate a piece that can captivate on more than one wavelength. Easily some of the better bits of poetry I've read in awhile.

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  • Heart Sutra
    May 6, 2008

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    I love the last stanza of the last entry!

    You really have such a unique voice Gill.

    Excellent work!


  • Namita
    April 19, 2008

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    All these three skins should definitely be in the book. Very naughty, Gilly

    - namita


  • Thoughts-of-Soloman
    April 18, 2008

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    So much to get teeth into, with this richly laced three course, both satisfying but more provocative meal. Yum!!


  • ArtFullyMe gold member
    April 18, 2008
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  • Suzanne Dia
    April 18, 2008

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    I don't envy Jaden and Zayra having to judge this. The big girls and boys are definitely coming out to play.

    Wonderful selections, Gilly



    and an extra: for good measure.

  • Rowan gold member
    April 18, 2008

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    I think there's an Angeline in all of us, maybe that's why we all love her so. This is a wonderful set of poems; each stands alone but compliment each other beautifully. Love your work, brilliant.


  • Nicolette gold member
    April 18, 2008

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    I have to agree with Gina about poetry being at your fingertips or perhaps inside your fingertips, Gilly as these poems show exactly that.

    This is gorgeous stuff and I loved all three of them; and of course your Angeline poems are always something special. I so loved the "he sashayed..", but then i loved all of this!! Wonderful real-life poetry, Gilly - loved them all!



    ~ Nicolette


    • NurseChilly gold member
      April 18, 2008
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      thank you my dear girlfriend... as always, your beautiful comments make my heart and eyes soar to the skies..

      thinking of you today


  • Emerald13
    April 18, 2008
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    hehe ... and in the posting i had to giggle i have this flashing thang at the top saying 'hit this naughty button' ... lol ...

  • Emerald13
    April 18, 2008

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    weak seams ... and ash .. gorgeous ... there is so much in these to love ... i am not going to list the ways .. i shall just enjoy ... Angeline sure got a hold on you ... >>> Gina


    • NurseChilly gold member
      April 18, 2008
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      Thank you so much Gina, your comments always lift my heart

      • Emerald13
        April 18, 2008
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        well then its mutual ! ... coz your poetry lifts my heart ... i admire very much (i am jealous) that poetry does seem to be at your fingertips ... always great reading >>> Gina

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