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mum

when i heard you were ill
the world slowed down
my life held its breath;
everything else rushes on around me
but i can't exhale


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Prompt is: "The Day I Stopped Breathing"



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  • dabpunx
    April 19, 2008

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    my mom had breast cancer and i didnt handle it well. shes in remission.. but this poem touched me deeply.


  • badnovocaine
    April 18, 2008

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    wow i liked this poem also, my mom had a brain tumor so i know how that feels. This poem is really well written. great job.


    • eoz
      April 19, 2008
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      thanks for comment

      glad you felt it expressed the feeling


  • mysticstorm gold member
    April 18, 2008

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    So very deep and heart felt...this is very touching, I know I would feel this way if my mother was ill...not a place I wish to go...wonderfully written in metaphor and meaning...excellent and beautiful...
    thank you for sharing...

    • eoz
      April 19, 2008
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      my Mum was rushed to hospital this week
      an awful scare which had me holding my breath with fear;
      Thank God, after surgery, it seems she is going to be alright! That of course has to be the best news but the Gold trophy, is a very nice end to a horrible week ~
      Thank You!

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