Heard response to "Selaam" in sand;by-passed my earand yet emerged full,a rapid germination of seed,
never felt nor seen,carried dry for years and years.Peace, of completenessentered presence withinblazing condition cooled,
politeness engaged eyes,through light-wide windowson the open seas of gratitude,
deep-through-to-new
wonder,mysterious,strange to me
ever-renewed reflected selfknowingly acknowledged and returned.
Not a further word was spoken.
Timeless attentionreceived in my chest,given something I did not know;
with no before nor after start...
He turned,walked awaymelted in the desert.
Leaving massive open heart.
Author notes
Selaam or Salaam: Turkish/Arabic-Peace be with you, Peace through completion.
A contest entry
- Mystic in the Desert by aslanlight.
450 points, ended April 25, 2008, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Contest Miracles, Signs & Wonders by Maatkara #79 Winklings and AP Friends by Lyndon.
3075 points, ended May 23, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Welcome any sincere responses.
Comments
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sandal castles in th wind, strokign the ear's shades, and not a sound is heard but the meaning is plucked from dust devils and gods.
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I love how the words warm me as I read them. The feeling one has when being in the presence of Love...warmth...you have captured it well, Sol. We live in deserts of our own making sometimes yet feel cold. Salaam...makes all the difference. Beautiful work is here. Peace, Rhonda
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I think this is a fine poem
for the original contest. For Maatkara's, I am not so sure but I do wish you well. Unexpected gratitude or generosity of heart suddenly 'thrust' upon one is an experience that is rare but it does happen!
Best wishes.
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Hi Lyndon,
My apologies:
I only just 'digested' this comment of yours, most likely because of recently being preoccupied with my first contest and many messages.
Thank you so much, I truly appreciate it.
Sol
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And so it should be GOLD.. as this speak of a thousand footprints in the hour-glass of sand, we all see and tread...
it is the open eye to the open heart my dear friend...
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It is like that when someone offers peace and we are ready to receive it, like a silent explosion that changes the world forever. Nothing else needs to be said - this needs to be said more. Every expression of it is individual, but a chorus is growing.
Congratulations.
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Inspirational!
The air of mystery is supreme! I'm left not so much with knowledge of what your saying but with more of a feeling of something silent within from of old.
Peace Georgia
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WoooaAH! Thank you so much Georgia!
I had just fallen asleep on top of my bed... woke up slightly and clicked to wake up any messages, to find this. Most gracious and generous of you, thank you Kerim/Sol 
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Thank you very much, I enjoyed responding to your contest which I felt was a wonderful invitation. Not only into the imagination, but for me to draw on sentiments which I hold dearly. Thank you very much for listing it.
I would also be interested to know in which ways you too, know of Rumi? Sol -
Do you read Rumi the poet and mystic?
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Jalalu'ddin Rumi
Hi aslanlight. Yes very much so, I was first introduced to Rumi when I was fifteen, been to visit his tomb in Konya several times and also that of Shamsi Tabriz. Please take a peek at my profile some time, when you have a chance. Sol
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This is amazing and beautiful. One to revisit, I love it.
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i don't think you're going to recieve the respect you deserve for this piece. IT'S FUCKING MASSIVE! Whoa! Don't know where to start. In my humble opinion you have got it! The open heart is never filled.... am i right? Life doesn't work like that (not that easy).
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Wow! Such awesome response, glad you like it and thank you very much indeed!!!
Yes, the 'open heart' is never filled, it isn't a 'thing' to fill.
'not that easy'... perhaps, but there can be 'tastes'. Your comment is massively appreciated. Sol
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Very nicely written. to me, its very calming and peaceful. I appreciate when a poem can do that to one's emotions
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I really liked this one, is this for a contest, because you should win?
Pretty much the reader is taken into a desert the whole time, and that is beautiful because I have never been to a desert.
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Mmm... This piece calms me, which is welcome with all the stress I've been dealing with. Unique structure, what with the italics and such. Beautiful write
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An interesting sentiment. Says much with few words - good job. Happy trails
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Very peaceful a relaxing write. Terrific sense of peac, that is lacking in our present world. We need these words at times.
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Well this is a very interesting read for me I must say!
I loved every word, phrase and statement within this poem.
It is as if you have reached some sort of inner peace.
It is also apparent you have also come to terms with yourself
I like how you incorporated Turkish/Arabic into your write!
Also how well you utilized your vocabulary
That was exceptional
This is also one of those poems
That reaches the heart and brings the reader to peace.
A piece of literature you can unwind to
Great job!
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Much Gratitude
ZStarz, I am honoured indeed! Thank you for such generous and rounded assessment. I found myself reworking this a few times, making alterations, more so than with most of my other 'writes'. You have made me very happy to have arrived, at it bringing such comment as you have given. Ah' contentment, Sol
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just the kind of thing needed when one's head wont turn off and you need to find some peace and quietude...
and I walked across the sand and my feet were warmed by the words again...
G.x
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I really like this setting, and your use of the word play, Sol. I have family who are from an Arab background, so this speaks strongly to me. Thanks!
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I like the asian philosophy that made it's way into this. You really do some nice formless (but somehow formed) poetry. Beautiful images .. and a moral that doesn't leave the aftertaste of self righteous in my mouth.
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Please keep your good eye on that!
Thanks Suzanne... Thank God! You would tell me if it did wouldn't you?! I'd hate that and would much appreciate you letting me know if I fell into it.
I've added some notes but wonder now, whether they may be appreciated by some or not? Could possibly come across a little patronising and I'd like to know what you reckon, so I can strip them away if so, rapidly?! Sol
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Not at all self righteous
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Thanks Suzanne
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Namaste - sigh
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damn, this made me cry Sol, such a gentle kindness here, that it touched a wide wound this morning and healed
thank you
Gilly.x
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Peace be with you also my brother and friend
Selaam
Noah
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