Could've been the day we looked
the Cuban crisis square in the eye;
or years living in a house of cards
fanning a succession of wars;
when we stopped breathing
waiting to exhale on the
count of three.
A contest entry
- Prompt 10 entries/ 30 words more or less by mysticstorm.
475 points, ended April 18, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Lots of things to hold our breath over, a person's history is filled with it and your metaphor shows that. Yeah, having lived in a house of cards myself I have learned to breathe lightly.
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Very well done...great metaphor and so much truth in your words...it really is scary how many experiences we have had just in our life time, that made us hold our breath...excellent work...
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Nice job with the prompt, such great use of metaphor using true history.
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