I met you,
not very long ago,
but it felt like I've known you for years.
Your smile,
made my knees weak.
When your eyes met mine,
I just wanted to drape my arms around you,
and never let go.
Your laugh,
it made my heart melt.
I loved everything about you,
and when you said you loved me,
I knew we were destined forever.
I guess I was fooled though,
because when you told me that,
I thought you mean't it,
but you didn't.
You lied,
and you kept your distance.
I knew what you were doing when you left late at night,
and snuck away.
I knew it,
and now I'll never forgive you,
never take you back.
From that time,
the time you told me the truth,
begged me back,
I left.
From then on it was never the same.
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I chose the option #6. Hope you enjoy.....
A contest entry
- Last Lines by Keith.
450 points, ended May 4, 2008, 33 entries
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Comments
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There are one or two mistakes in the typing of this, and although I sympathise with the sentiments, it's a bit self centred. The word I occurs with great frequency. Thanks for entering, and here's the original poem to look at:
The original poem is by a Scottish poet called George Bruce:
http://www.nls.uk/writestuff/bruce.html
It's called THE RED SKY
Till that moment the church spire
At the top of our street was encased
In that blue sky. Occasionally white
Puffclouds drove straight to heaven.
At the foot of our street
The Central Public School, granite
Also encased in blue.
We lived between with the
Worms, forkies, shell-fish, crabs-
All things that crept from stones,
And with the daisies for company.
Each was alive and very worthy,
Just right, till I met
The curly boy with square shoulders
Who knocked me down
Pushing his fist into my teeth.
Then a crack ran through the red sky.
From then on it was never the same.
"forkies" are earwigs, by the way.
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Nice emotion...
I like this...^^
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