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Remember Me

Your memories should have no grief

                                             nor sorrow sent with sighs
Remember me in quiet days

                                          when rain whispers lullabies
Remember me when evening stars

                                       shed light on your adoring eyes
Remember me when first you wake

                                    catching a glimpse of a red sunrise

Remember me in dreams on high

                                  Remember me when spring walks by
Think of me let the memories soothe

                               I'm free as a bird and my way is smooth


 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Inspired by: "- Sentimental Being."
Picture: Courtesy of "PhotoBucket".

In Loving memory for my wife...

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A contest entry

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  • Carly Pop gold member
    May 7, 2008
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    thank you for your entry, beautiful poem


  • aboomer silver member
    May 1, 2008

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    This showed up in my notes, then vanished - just wanted to check it out. It is very lovely - beautiful wording.
    best wishes to you


  • second-born
    April 25, 2008

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    wow...this is such a heartwarming piece...full of lovely thoughts...an inspiration to all those who are hopeless...surely I'll remember this write...

  • Judith Chandler
    April 18, 2008

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    Uplifting thoughts. May you truly be free as a bird, off into the stratosphere with no regrets.

    RIP
    jjj


  • Nicolette gold member
    April 18, 2008

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    Heartfelt and beautiful poetry, Nicky... I think we would all want these words to be inscribed in marble. What a loving gift you've given to your dear departed wife here, my friend (of course I know her name...).

    Loved the picture of the dove too ... it compliments the love and the sentiments of the poem so very well. When something touches me really deeply I always say "now all my doves have left me"... I think her does are flying too..



    ~ Nicolette


  • ShelleyA gold member
    April 18, 2008

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    A beautiful write and skillfully crafted epitaph. Heartfelt. Poignant. Good imagery, flow, rhyme and tone. Deep expression of emotion. Good word choice, alliteration and assonance. Lovely words of tribute for your wife. Well penned. Best wishes in the contest.


  • Amorita Maharaj
    April 18, 2008
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    Sweet :)

    Really sweet words


  • Cannonsfire
    April 18, 2008
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    Ah such loving and soft gentle words, they are just beautiful to read. Love, C


  • Robin Candor
    April 18, 2008

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    I see you made a number of changes and all for the good in my opinion. I really like you. You have the ability to listen and still stay consistent with your own ideals and concepts. May we all grow together and give the readers something that touches their own experience. RC


  • creationsfromheart
    April 17, 2008

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    this is a beautifully perfect penned write I love this and wish you all the luck in this contest honestly this is trully golden!


  • crimsondew
    April 17, 2008
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    just beautiful

    This is so heartfelt and full of love and care...
    All the very best in the ocntest

  • Robin Candor
    April 17, 2008
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    I am no master, I only ask two things, that you listen to what I'm saying to either disagree with and discard or agree with and perhaps still discard. Secondly, that you take your piece and say it out loud verbally to yourself and then say it again out loud verbally with my suggestions. I will not be offended if you reject my thinking.

    "Your memories should have no grief or sorrows sent with sighs/Remember me in quiet days, while raindrops whisper lullabyes/Remember me when evening stars, look down on you with steadfast eyes/

    Remember me when first you wake, catching glimpses of a new sunrise/Remember me... what we shared, remember me when spring walks by/Think once of me when you are free, because...free as a bird am I!

    If you read the original and then find in speaking it back to yourself without the 'ands' that the impact is stronger let me know. If I'm just silly, let me know that also. I read and reread this over and over both ways. It is a beautiful poem and I pray my input will not offend. RC


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    April 17, 2008

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    Really beautiful I like the rhyme throughout. Thanks for entering I wish you the best

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