Ahhh' puddled in the water, let me get at all that mud,
I'd a' soon be in that fishing boat, but here,
this is more than quite enough.
Mustn't get my trousers wet, been told so many times,
next year I'll be in that there boat
amongst the fishing lines.
Does she know these shallow water secrets,
this wondrous world in which I am so lost?
Seems it's all here only for my eyes, ya' know
an' I'm fixed
the water, stones, crabs and jelly...
no matter what the cost.
Author notes
Bounced to the page, straight from the picture prompt.
Image credit: Frederick McCubbin "Moyes Bay, Beaumaris"
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Fantastic!
This is brilliant, I love it. A perfect take on the prompt. Your cleverness never ceases to amaze me. Excellent! (And your commas perfect again too!)
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I really want to go to the beach now. Is that ok?
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You bet, let's all go together!
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I'm pleased the image inspired you so easily, sometimes spontaneous thoughts and feelings are stronger than those much pondered. Refreshing approach and point of view, certainly a story many could relate to you have shared here. Best wishes to you.
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reminds me of holidays in Cornwall as a child and staring for what seemed like hours into rock pools and finding all the joys of the ocean there...
this is joyous and happy... just what I needed to read this morning my friend
Gilly.x
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I sense an interesting character through whose eyes this is told. Wonderful.
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Thank you very much balakirev, I'm honoured by your comment. Sol
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