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One Red Rose in the Window

If you see one red rose in the window
you'll know I have passed by your place
like a whisper through your gardens.

You'll know I was there watching over you
like I had promised on that fateful day.
So many years passed it has now been.

You'll know I protected you through
yet another night of terrors and horrors
too unknown for any one mind to comprehend.

You'll know that I had kept my promise,
that I still love you to this very day
despite the past that had created the chasm.

If when you awake and walk to your window
to welcome the morning sun, you see sitting there
the symbol of my love, you'll know I was there...

If you see one red rose in the window

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  • movedon
    November 14, 2008

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    *runs to window and searches and find nothing*


  • XLadyElinorX
    May 6, 2008
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    this is gorgeous! What a good write! Full of sweetness and longing and hope. I love it.


  • Mark McNulty
    April 29, 2008

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    This really is a beautifully written poem with a true sense of unconditional love oozing from the lines. I am quite impressed and glad I had the chance to read it. Excellent job on a wonderful piece.


  • Angelflower
    April 21, 2008

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    Wow... this was really sweet.. I really liked the emotion that you put into it, and the imagery was great.. Best of luck to you in the contest...

    Jetleena


  • Pingwen
    April 19, 2008
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    Very romantic. I don't have much to say besides it's good and I like it. Good job!


  • frownsnfreckles
    April 19, 2008

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    unashamedly romantic and full of the sweetest sentiment, yet within there lies a secret...

    You'll know I protected you through
    yet another night of terrors and horrors
    too unknown for any one mind to comprehend.


  • Little Blue Bird
    April 19, 2008

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    Awwww

    I love it. It is so romantic and .... I just can't say enough about it. I just love it. Very well done. If this were my contest you'd be at the top of my finalist list, and win first prize.


  • Neha Sharma silver member
    April 19, 2008

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    This is a very sweet poem. I liked the basic theme of the whole verse. the last line has been very tactfully and beautifully used to create the charisma of poetry. nice work.
    keep it up.
    -Neha


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    April 19, 2008

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    Superb

    A most elegant write, indeed. I like it just the way it is. Thanks for sharing this one with us. I hope you have a good day.


  • Keith
    April 19, 2008

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    This is a very sweet little love poem, and its a good idea to begin and end with the same line. Chasim should be spelt chasm.

    The original poem is by George Mackay Brown. He was an Orkney poet, and wrote some wonderful stuff.

    Love Letter

    To Mistress Madeline Leslie, widow
    At Quoy, parish of Voes, in the time of hay:

    The old woman sat in her chair, mouth agape
    At the end of April.
    There were buttercups in a jar at the window.

    The floor is not blue now
    And the table has flies and bits of crust on it.
    Also the lamp glass is broken.

    I have the shop at the end of the house
    With sugar, tea, tobacco, paraffin
    And, for whisperers, a cup of whisky.

    There is a cow, a lady of butter, in the long silk grass
    And seven sheep on Moorfea.

    The croft girls are too young.
    Nothing but giggles, lipstick, and gramophone records.

    Walk over the hill Friday evening.
    Enter without knocking
    If you see one red rose in the window.


  • StarEyes
    April 18, 2008

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    Awwwwwwwww... That is sooooo sweet! How about one white rose? Don't mummy get that much

    Seriously, kiddo, this is great! I love the thought in this one.. Reminds me of ... well, never mind.

    Best of luck in this contest!!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • Nephlim
    April 18, 2008

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    I liked the title, and the last line, and the beginning stanza, and every stanza inbetween all that . But the specific ones I named the best, because the title and last line were just really sweet, and the beginning stanza set a wonderful scene for the rest of the poem to feed off of
    GREAT job
    diggin it majorly


  • Mrs. Mautino
    April 17, 2008

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    Well...when I get a rose (if i do ) i'll either think "OH MY GOD! HE CAME BY WITHOUT HITTING ME WITH A PANCAKE! YAY!", or "Hey, that cottonheadedninnymuggins didn't give me a hug! >.> ", or "AHH! Stalker!". But in the end, I would be grateful that you dropped by.

    Ok, now for the sane part of my comment...honestly, i love this one, to the very end. It's perfect and i DEMAND that you win. if you don't...well...there will be blood...and milkshakes

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