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Dear "Friends"

Listen now my dearest friends,
For I would like to make amends
I would like to say what's true
And express all of my thoughts to you

Locked inside, I sit and stare
While you go out, you're unaware
As I am pacing through the halls
No one sees me, no one calls

"Come out to play now, it's okay"
"It's not your business, go away!"
Is what you'll say when I will speak
My situation, cold and bleak

And reading this, you'll have no clue
Who this is directed to
All your questions will be fought
I'm keeping secret, every thought

Oh, maybe I did fail to mention
You probably won't pay attention
To the words you do not need
This poem that you'll never read

Listen closely, dearest "friends"
For I would like to make amends
But you're not who I thought I knew,
So now, what kind of friends are you?

Author notes

April 17, 2008... I have a group of friends that don't really include me in anything. They forget about me and when I ask them questions, they say it's none of my business... I've lost many friends that way and I'm afraid some of my current friendships are going down that same path. So this is a letter to them.

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  • Iloveugh
    June 27
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    Oh.

    I know people like this but none of my friends would do this to me. I'm sorry for you friendships lost. This is very well written i could feel the different emotions as i read. I liked it alot. thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck.
    ..<3.
    Shelly

  • xCandieKissesx
    May 14
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    Grrr. I hate when friends stab you in the back! I can relate to your feelings because I've went through that for a very long time. Luckily, I saved myself before it was too late. Well you've captured the message that no friendship is perfect. Stellar write! Thanks for entering and good luck!

    + Jackie

  • whispernthedark gold member
    April 26

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    It is quite frustrating when our supposed friends just suddenly turn their backs with no explanation. You've captured it well. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.

    ♥
    whisper

  • toomysterious
    April 23

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    I really like the way you told it like it is. Enjoyed the read. And Good Luck in the contest.
    The rhyme and flow is excellent,
    not to mention the sentiment
    To you, I must take off my hat,
    Cause who needs "friends" like that.


  • OhEmetophobia
    April 19
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    This poem expresses that feeling of being left out and forgotten by supposed friends perfectly. From the title with "friends" in quotation marks, right down to the last lines. Oh, and I'm impressed by your rhyming, considering how hard it is to do and how easy you made it look. Thanks for entering and good luck!

  • She Has My Heart
    April 19

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    I hate people who do that to others so casually...so brusquely...the bastards. The tone of this piece is f*cking perfect and I hope you write one out, screw it up and shove it in your "friends" mouths so they choke. Not to be harsh or anything...

    MY girlfriend's "friends" were pretty similar and cause she'd known them for so long she found it hard to break away...but now she has and has got some much better, true friends, so I hope you can do the same too. It seems like if that's the way they treat you then they shouldn't mean a dime to them. Go out have fun, find some real genuine people and shove it in their faces when they realise they've lost a great person.

    Good luck in the contest x take xcare x


  • Dreaming In Ink
    April 17

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    I know the feeling. For the past three years or so I've had like a million different groups of friends and tried to fit in, and nothing worked. It'll get better, don't worry. Thanks for entering, this was really good.


  • CaliOkie silver member
    April 17
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    This is an excellent write. Full of hurt feelings and rejection that many feel when friends are thoughtless or unkind.

    I like the flow of it, the way it progresses through different stages of feeling and then resolves with the final question of "what kind of friends are you?" Of course, the poem has already answered that question.

    Well done.

    CaliOkie

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