I have to talk to you.
Thought my last words are few.
I loved you, I really did.
Of course you know why
it has to be this way.
You ruined our relationship.
That is all that I can say.
Of course there are other reasons,
but the big one is that you cheated.
You cheated on our love,
On our kids and our hearts.
You probably don't love
them the way you should, anyways.
I needed to talk to you,
before you left and walked away.
Now, you long to leave.
You understand.
That's all I have to say.
A contest entry
- Last Lines by Keith.
450 points, ended May 4, 2008, 33 entries
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I feel for you
Nice write, but see if you can tell it with little more Imagination -
as your only 15 I'm guessing this is fiction, it's not bad but it's always better to write from the heart about emotions, of cause you can write fiction but it's best to keep it light hearted. any way well done
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It's a nice poem, but I'd try to change a few things. First of all line #2 I don't understand. Also the dubble use of "of course" isn't very pretty.
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deep
seems like a write from the heart... I hope all is well after whatever inspired this. Beautiful
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hmm.
thank you... but i dont really understand that.. -
Well, the end of love is hard to cope with. You might be interested to read the final lines of the original:
But something happened to change that, to change
Our world into a segment of a fragment,
And happiness became the thing we knew
Could never last. And so the moon, the sun
No longer mattered but became
Undistinguished lights. Ugly because senn
By no one. What is special apart from life?
And that is gone. Do I anticipate?
Perhaps in time, but time is happening.
This time we're all in it together.
And then I'll tell you, I'll be able to,
How I loved you all, how my faults
Were only faked, how I appreciated every one
Of you. There won't be time unless I say it now
But there's a taste that holds me back
You understand. Thats all I have to say
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