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pain love and sacrifices

Painting this smile upon my face
Always the one to cry
I
Never want this to end

Looking the other way my smile drains
Over thinking everything
Vile pain arises in my stomach
Everything melts away when i see you

Saying this will last
Always falling, I should know
Crying wont help a thing
Right, or wrong nothing ever changes
Im
Fighting the feeling..
I
Cant take it much longer
Everyone knows,
Save me please, let me see you..just one more time

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  • hawkeslake gold member
    October 14, 2008
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    Such longing and pain! We can put so much control over our happiness in other people's awareness and attention to us, and then our suffering is even more intense, as your poem illustrates. You write so clearly and cleanly of the hope and despair. Thank you for sharing, and you will be in my thoughts.