A shame of human history
To turn our eyes away from hate
We send our youth to die in sand
Leave Africa to its sad fate
A generation of humankind
Disappearing from this Earth
Not because of what they did
But because of place of birth
Genocide revived from Auschwitz
In a land of diamonds and rust
A ghost sent back to haunt us
From the past's explosive dust
Author notes
prompt is "From the past's explosive dust"
A contest entry
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Comments
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Great rythem, very good.
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You've picked up on the rhythm well, though you've missed an s out of Auschwitz and there's a redundant apostrophe in line 4. That apart, this is a very relevant poem, and it's quite eerie that you've picked up similar themes to the original by Sydney Tremayne
EXPLOSIVE DUST
What is done is done, is done
Shouts the starling in the sun.
Belsen's buried in the brain.
Roots that thirst like weasels rip
Earth and what earth covers up.
Every crime and more to come
Is the promise of each time
Yet the world outlives the lot.
Generations are on heat:
In shining ignorance like flame
The newest creatures, without blame,
Rise in vigour of their blood
To stalk each other through the wood.
Constantly the world disowns
Casting sermons upon stones
And consumes its rotten bones.
Mind draws nothing, the sun must
From the past's explosive dust. -
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Thanks for pointing out the errors. I always have trouble with possessive pronouns. It is kind of eerie that the poems are similar, because I did not read the original first. By the way, these are interesting contests, keep it up!
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Hard Hitting!
I love the way your mind worked on the prompt...
"From the past's explosive dust". Your words are both explosive and thought provoking. You have captured the horror of Darfur that we are accosted with every day in the news and your words bring those images to the forefront of my mind.
All the best in the contest...
Sue
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