Memories winding through my mind
of childhood days when words were kind.
A thought, a sound, a seashell found
sun kissed sands, young love still blind.
Days to cherish, so soon to fly
like seagulls to a distant sky.
Seaweed plaits; ankles bound
Whispering grasses, curlew’s cry.
A parasol, a smiling face
a gentle hand, a special place.
She’s gone and yet she’s still around;
her voice the wind; in timeless grace.
Author notes
Image credit: Frederick McCubbin "Moyes Bay, Beaumaris"
I have made a change to the last stanza; decided to keep it in the rubaiyat scheme.
In a list
- a) My Gold Awards • next in list
- h) Quiet Stuff • next in list
- k) My Personal Favourites • next in list
A contest entry
- In Need Of A Damn Good Read by Errant Panther.
525 points, ended April 19, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Honorable mention
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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absolutely loved this! It was wonderful. This is a beautiful write with splendid imagery, the rhythm and rhyme is brilliant too. nostalgic write... thank you for entering and I wish you luck in the contest... take care Hugs and Love Linda xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
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good job even though i am still considered a kid at my age i still look back and miss the carefree days of my youth, having three kids had got my carefree days long gone and no i do not regret them
check out my poem final days its similar to this -
You have a special feel for meter. The rhythm of your poems is always impeccable. Well done!
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A lovely poem
Full of atmosphere, this poem says so much to me in such few words. Innocent Love, nostalgia for the days of yore' ,sadness of loss but wistful awarness also of a mystical presence. And the picture - so appropriate, altogether beautiful
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sweet, and charming.
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This is a beautiful write that relates very well to the lovely picture. You have used some wonderful imagery, and the rhythm and rhyme is amazing. Nice write! Blessings, Patty
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great
i like this poem it calls for a mood of self reflection and it brings about a peaceful serenity
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She’s gone and yet she’s still around;
her voice the wind; in timeless grace.
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that was really good adn my fav. part.
i loved this poem
amazing
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This is pretty nice and fits the picture well. Thanks for entering.
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Oh I just absolutely loved this! It was wonderful. Memories...are they not great? and yours seemed like a very good one at that. congrats on winning gold, nice write
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This is a captivating piece of writing for its beautiful cadence and its splendid imagery. The memories of the past have been recollected in an artistic way creating beauty of sound and imagination.
Thanks for sharing your cherished memories with the readers.
Rahi
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This was wonderful! the image that you created was just so sweet and loving.. Memories is like time travel.. You remember everything that happened but you always wonder what would have happened in the future if you changed something in the past..
you did amazing.. Congrats on the gold.. Well deserved..
Angel
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This is a wonderful poem with some fond memories. Your imagery is amazing, and I felt as if I was right there on the beach with you. This gold was well deserved. Congratualtions! Blessings, Patty
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Superb
Aye, 'tis a fine write, indeed. Imagery, rhythm and rhyme are just fine. As a Senior Citizen I real appreciate what you have written.
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A rather lovely poem, I think the internal rhyme in the first Rubaiyat line either needs to go or to be repeated in the other similar lines, a great pleasure to read as always from you and we both look forward to many more entries through our series.
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Outstanding
I enjoyed reading this poem which is full of great imagery and subtle rhyme. You have a talent for writing that shows in all your poetry. This has a light tone and I loved all the sea imagery. Congratulations on the gold trophy.
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Excellent
A wonderful creation, so deserving of the gold. Congratulations.
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Wonderful Poem!!!
Congratulations on winning the Gold. This was a lovely poem and much deserving of its trophy. A pleasure to read this morning.
Take Care,
Sandy
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This is sweet and sad; there are people whom it is a pleasure to remember, even though they are gone. I enjoyed reading the rhythm and rhymes, images and soft sounds. Very well done. Good luck!
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I like the softness of the imagery used in this piece, and the word choice seems to point to so much more than what is being described. Captivating with a solid rhyme scheme, best wishes to you.
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This is rather sad and haunting. You did a fine job with it. I like your work and would like to add you to my favorites. Shancy.
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so serene and calm you have taken me there with the way you write. I might have to look up two words
Of course your rhyme and rhythm is perfect 
You took a painting and breathed immense life into the scene and I love your writing as always 
Suz
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