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Two Puppet Masters

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Lost, lonely  yet I am not alone.
But the puppet dancing to the tune of my desires.
Not one but two masters hold the strings,
pulled one way then the other.
What will happen if I give one master full reign,
or if the strings break, will I be left alone.
My remains a pile of sticks and strings, with no direction.
No master to pull my strings, no one to turn to wheels of passion.
Or will I become a real girl and make my own ecstasy.

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  • Mykeee
    April 29, 2008

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    truly Amazing

    Very interesting - I love the metaphor of being a puppet wondering if you let lose your strings from another. Will the other master take hold of the strings? Or will they leave you in a pile of despair? I could be wrong. But This one was very mature and intricate. Great job!!


  • xXBrutalRomanceXx
    April 26, 2008

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    this is a good poem. i love how you describe the situation. "my remains a pile of sticks and strings, with no direction" nice! good work!


  • ucancallmereal
    April 25, 2008

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    wow that was really good and enlightening. ive never quite thought about it that way before.. very good write!


  • Dark Otter
    April 19, 2008

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    Everyone like this.

    So do I. Original concept that is written well. I do question the last two lines. Is it consistent with the metaphor of the rest of the poem?

    But the puppet dancing to someone else's tune.

    No puppeteer to pull my strings, no one to make me dance to their desires

    Or will I become a real girl, flesh and bone, capable of being loved.

    Very good poem. Suggestions may or may not improve it. I enjoyed the artistic concept.


  • TakenforLife
    April 19, 2008

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    This was a very good poem! I love how u described being pulled by two masters! How you wander if you'll be a pile of sticks and strings or a real girl! Excellent job!


  • Ms Sexy silver member
    April 18, 2008

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    life does feel like you are being controlled by the man sometimes but with strength and faith you can break away from the control. good write


  • ennovy silver member
    April 17, 2008

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    Well it must be very confusing for the pretty little doll with two masters...being pulled first one way then another. I love how you told this story in verse.A beautiful job daughter.........Mom loves you....Ma


  • Abson
    April 17, 2008

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    A VERY CREATIVE WRITE

    This is a very creative piece of poetry that paints a glaring scenery of the persona's dilemma in the hand of two puppet masters.You did an amazing job sister.Kudos to you for making this write so real.


  • AddictiveTRUTH
    April 17, 2008

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    You know this is differnt...

    very much so...loved the short form of this...but on the more serious tip, I love it
    really I can relate and truly understand the questions that arise from this situation.

    This my dear and lovely sister is my favorite

    Thanks for sharing, and always much love.
    KaPricia


    • raingoddess gold member
      April 17, 2008
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      Thanks

      Thanks Sis, I glad that you stopped by to read it and you liked it.



      Ruth

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