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No One

Somewhere underneath this silver-grey stone
Lies the deceased who lived life alone
A body who died without even a name
Was found out alone with no one to blame
No one comes here and no one ever goes
Who mourns a disaster no one even knows?



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April 17, 2008.... One of my fears would probably be dying with no one beside me... so I wrote my own epitaph in case that happens.

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  • Leance
    July 12

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    I certainly can understand and relate to your fear of dying alone. It must be the saddest thing I can imagine. Your description here is wonderful, I really enjoyed this even though the subject is so sad.
    I enjoyed these to lines the most as my sister was listed as a Jane Doe for a very long time until she was identified.
    A body who died without even a name
    Was found out alone with no one to blame
    It was very hard when we found out however, we were finally able to lay to rest at 16 years old.
    Thank you so much for entering and best of luck in the contest.
    Leance


  • delightfulmess silver member
    April 25, 2008

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    oooh I love your chosen favorite poem.
    your answers are honest and heart felt. Well done thank you for entering and best of luck



    Delila


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    April 23, 2008

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    this is a unique and wonderfully crafted piece and the answers are deep and honest. I love the peoms and the lyrics well done


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    April 19, 2008

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    Very well Done.
    Thanks for entering
    I wish you the best of luck



  • Death of the Author
    April 19, 2008

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    Brilliant.

    My latest poem/lyrics actually contains lines about people in unknown gravestones...with no names and no one who knows who they are...I love the last line of this, perfect ending.

    Good luck x

  • Judith Chandler
    April 18, 2008

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    That is sad but at least no one would spit on your grave, right? Some consolation and it is some consolation that at least you picked what you want on your lonely stone. lol


  • CaliOkie silver member
    April 17, 2008
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    Sad and beautiful. Strange, I have always had the feeling that I would be alone when I die -- I don't know why, just a feeling. I sure hope not.

    This is another fine write. I feel that your style is growing and becoming more polished. Well done.

    CaliOkie


  • isabelwk
    April 17, 2008

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    how sad!

    Just think how many of us live life the same way, without someone else to mourn us when we go to the great beyond.

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