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Mortal Beauty

Mortal perfection
Flawless complexion
Temptation’s desire
Nature conspires
A budding past
Bloom while it lasts






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  • Parth Sawhney
    August 16

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    a lovely piece..
    i agree wid all comments..wonderful imagery..
    i loved the phrase "temptation's desire"..
    awesome writin'..
    keep up d good work..

    take care..
    ur pal..

    -Parth


  • Aalta silver member
    June 10

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    beautifully detailed...... for 6 lines to contain such immense details is amazing..... the imagery as well as the words are beautiful...
    great write


  • Lavender Butterfly silver member
    April 17, 2008
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    Immensely creative and detailed.... x


  • Dygurl
    April 17, 2008
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    loved it, great imegery. Short and to the point good luck in your contest.