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My Last Breath...Alive

I don't know

what to say, and

it doesn't matter

how I really feel...

but know that

deep down inside,

I am alone.

Buried

alive

In pain from affliction

while I become an addict

of your self-pleasure

of hurting me.

So much

turmoil,

of Life's Quicksand

and I have slipped

into the grains

of

Darkness;

while I gasp

for air

and there is none left...

Trying not to be greedy,

for I haven't

much more

time,

as I continue to hang on

by the web

I've spun

of this

so-called

Relationship.

Kissing me

you say

is my Blessing,

when in reality

it's

my

Curse

while I die

s-l-o-w-l-y

from the cyanide

of your saliva

that pierces holes in my

tongue...

forbidded to talk

of such

heinous crimes

behind my bedroom

doors.

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  • LeilaJayne
    May 10, 2008

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    Just a quick comment to say thanks for entering this into my contest, sorry you didnt win but obviously there can only be three trophies given, which is a shame cause in this contest there deserved to be alot more winners! xxx


  • LeilaJayne
    May 8, 2008
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    Thanks for entering! x


  • secberm
    April 21, 2008
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    Well done, sister. Write on. One.

    Dez


  • MahoganyFlow
    April 18, 2008

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    while I die
    s-l-o-w-l-y
    from the cyanide
    of your saliva
    that pierces holes in my
    tongue...
    forbidded to talk
    of such
    heinous crimes
    behind my bedroom
    doors.....you always kill it with your endings sis. Loved the expression!


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    April 17, 2008

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    Very well written

    really captured us grippingly.
    It is such a piercing poem, well written and smartly
    done. I like how you shortened the fonts it made us
    feel the diminished affects of what you had boldly
    written.
    well done poetess, well done!
    ears/Seattle.
    you are unleashing....powerfully!


  • HaleyMary
    April 17, 2008

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    Powerful expression of emotion in this piece, Sis. I liked the darkness of this. It seemed to show how sometimes love can seem so picture perfect, but in private things can seem so different. I liked the part of cyanide of the saliva. It seemed metaphorical, like a kiss of death. Thanks for sharing and keep writing.


  • moluv10
    April 17, 2008

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    Dark and kind of seductive at the same time. I love how you wrote this. i think someone would breathe life into you before you take your last breath because they wouldn't want to lose you and your beautiful poetic soul..... Great job! keep on writing....

    • Ephiphany
      April 17, 2008
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      Thanks Maurice

      I appreciate your warm comment. Never would have thought of it this way, but hey that is also the Beauty of others reading your work, huh?
      I love the last part of your comment too, btw.
      Intrigueing, and deliteful

      All the best my friend,
      e


  • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
    April 17, 2008

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    forbidded to talk

    you know i love this
    honey my mouth is open
    i cant say much i liked it
    though

    Juju


    • Ephiphany
      April 17, 2008
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      Thank you Love'

      you know I appreciate anytime you visit.
      Now, get some rest
      theLady


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    April 17, 2008

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    This is dark and deep. Fantastic writing here. I love the language used and the descriptive way you have used the words. It is very very darkly-beautiful as well and I enjoyed reading it.

    Love
    Wayne Leon
    x


    • Ephiphany
      April 17, 2008
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      Thank you so much Wayne

      always I will remember you


  • mzmikki
    April 17, 2008
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    Chilling.....

    This is amazing honey.... I feel this one... It struck a nerve....

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