Falling orbs of crystal white
Hang in a balanced abstraction
Over my head where I sleep
The not-so-naked walls
Haunt my dreams
The designs intertwine with
The orbs and create chaos
Confusion
Much to the delight of others
Hiding in the corner
Weeping tears fall in wonder
Sleep soundlessly if you can
But the screams of a child
Can not be ignored
Whether you strive to save
What you know you can not
Don't try to fade away
Lay on the cold ground, keep warm
And smile upon
The falling orbs of crystal white
Author notes
Dad or brother, or anything is fine with me
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i like it
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orbsss
thisis another fine work. You envision things in a way that i enjoy and can share your view. Thank you for being.
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this is beautiful, just like you!
and your sweet words paint grand pictures
in my little mind...
i love you, even though you are crazy.
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Lines 6 and 7: I think that could be changed to "the designs intertwine with the orbs/Creating chaos" or "Intertwining designs of orbs/chaos created(creating chaos)"
Just a thought.
Just My thoughts.
Very beautiful and abstract poem..When I saw the titles I thought it'd be about ghosts, but this is very deep and fascinating.
~VoT
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