Against medical advice
I recklessly went,
up into my head,
unescorted!
Medication neglected,
depression affected,
insanity detected.
Hopelessly I fell through
the broken windows of…
an uncommon mind.
Impaled by a myriad of
long suppressed emotions.
I’m lost in the confusion of
splintered shards of reason.
Endlessly wandering through
the subterranean tunnels
playing hide and seek with sanity
in the fractures of my mind.
Author notes
http://cleopata.deviantart.com/art/Hide-Don-t-Seek-98296230
19 A stained-glass slice of fruitcake
In a list
A contest entry
- Word Prompt 1: Glass by Metaphorist.
600 points, ended June 20, 2008, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - What Are The Sounds Of Horror Within Yourself? by theredcatjazzoflove.
700 points, ended October 10, 2008, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Do You Suffer with Depression ? ~~~ Enter here by blondone.
700 points, ended March 1, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Fantastic! This deserved to win its trophies
This reminds me of the days when I walked around feeling hollow and broken... sometimes I begin to retract to the old ways if I dare step into my mind alone. Wonderful dark imagery, great poem!
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enjoyed this well thought out piece
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Thanks for entering && Good luck
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Great write! Good luck!
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Great job, the fourth stanza was my favorite. Very well written and I think this describes depression insanely well.
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Wow. I really like this poem. you have afair shot in this contest. Good Luck!!
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I love this one. Thanks for sharing!
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This is exactly what I'm looking for. This details everything I go through. Well written, and easy flowing.
Thanks for entering. Good Luck
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Oh yes this is inside a mind full of depression the twist and turns we make I like I will leave this one for sure and thank you for entering
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Oh wow! This is an awesome take on the prompt. When I first read this prompt, I knew I liked it, but my muse went on vacation and left me shaking my head. LOL
I'm happy that yours stayed for you did a great job.
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I really liked this poem- it reminds me of my own dad's struggle, on and off the meds, until he finally lost. Great read, good luck in the contest!
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( Thank u for sharing.... I enjoyed...good luck.)
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I enjoyed reading this. Thank you for sharing. Good luck in the contest.
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this is good. I lyk it. good luck
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i like this here piece i think you did a very great excellent job the way you describe depression good luck in the contest
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eeeew. Now here's a poem I can really relate to. This is superbly written. An excellent take on the prompt, even for a pre-write. Thanks for entering my contest. It's an honor to have your work shown here.
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Thank you for the wonderful comment
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Ooooh, I really like this one! The degree of insanity is off the charts. I personally feel this way daily, so I definitely can relate with each and every line. Wonderful job and thanks for entering!
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very alluring... gives a small taste of insanity.
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I love this. Cleverly written. The last stanza was my favorite actually. Well done! Thanks for entering.
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I love the first stanza. Excellent metaphor throughout.
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Can see the emotion in this piece I loved it!
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Wonderful ode to the fine art of psychosis. Lighthearted almost and deliciously weird. Really love the line "splintered shards of reason." Kudos!
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wonderful..I am so fascinated by insanity and you touched on it wonderfully..thanks for entering
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wonderful use of metaphor! "lost in the confusion of splintered shards of reason"..wow! Love this write.
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"playing hide and seek with sanity"
That line stuck in my mind the first time I read this, yesterday, and I still love it. This poem is wonderful, and a pretty good example of that can happen I suppose. Thanks for entering, and best of luck.
~Amy
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