Slowly treading through the night,
Into the forest,
No light and no path,
Have I lost my way?
Neck skin crawls,
Shadows move and dance,
A crazy dream?
Or twisted reality?
Snapped twigs,
Scorched trees,
Something is near,
Something is here...
Imagination and paranoia?
Or instincts telling me to leave?
Something is near,
I know it's here...
Maybe this is just a nightmare,
Maybe it's not real...
Fear of the dark...
Fear of the dark...
Author notes
This is based on an incident when I was younger, and it's partly inspired by Iron Maiden's legendary song: Fear Of The Dark
A contest entry
- Walking into the Darkness! by vampireblood.
300 points, ended September 21, 2008, 66 entries
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Comments
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A very nice poem. Everyone can empathize with this poem because we all have experienced this fear.
Anyway, nice poem with a nice source of inspiration.
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fear, a powerful emotion, very nicely written,
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That would be really scary. The neck skin crawling is an apt image.
Congrats on your bronze trophy.
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This may just be me but I think It may read better if fear of the dark was only said once at the end, but thats only my opinion. Poetry is such a personal thing. Other than that I really enjoyed this.
I can relate to this. Thinking there is someone following you because it is nighttime. Everything is so signifiagant, the sounds of twigs snapping and the wind whistling highlighted by the dark. Great write. -
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Thank you for the comment
an well, we all have our different opinions, but I shall take yours into mind
an I think many people can relate to this one
an once again, thank you for the comment
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I really liked this. The dark can play tricks on ones imagination, and sometimes we think we hear or see something we really dont, but at the same time we just have those feelings as if someone or thing is really there. I think alot of people could relate to this. Not necassarily just when they were really young, but even as adults. Nicely done on this piece, I enjoyed reading it. Thankd for entering and best of luck to you in my contest.
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It is amazing the way our minds work when we are scared, in fear of something... It plays such dirty tricks. We know deep down that the only thing to be afraid of is our own minds (unless you live in the middle of a really big city with a high crime rate)! But the fear is still there and it still makes us uneasy and paranoid. The description is real good here, and I could almost feel the fear.. Well done!
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Thank you very much
I was thinking about something that happened when I was younger that has really made me fear the dark (O.O) while writing this
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I used to fear the dark...then I got a REALLY BIG NIGHT LIGHT!! Lol.. then I wasn't scared anymore...People always make fun of me though, when they stay at my house..But hey as long as I feel safe who cares...
I really liked it.. Shows your fear of the dark.. well done..I enjoyed it a lot..
Jetleena
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I was trying to get my fear of the dark into this one, an it looks like i managed
When i was ten, I was with friends an i went into some woods at night with them to play hide an seek, an I came across the barguest O.O
At the time I didn't realise it was "Barguast" an i thought it was just a huge dog!!
Since then, I've been scared of the dark, yet ironically my Wiccan name is The Nightwalker
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Aww.. lol.. very interesting..lol.. you poor thing I bet you were scared out of your wits.. I would have turned girl and screamed or something lame like that..lol..
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I ran out of the woods, tripping over everything, thinking Barguest was chasing me, an I was screaming like a girl lol XD
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